Oh, that was a surprisingly interesting prologue! You don't see many stories that start off with the MC getting his arse kicked after planning for over a decade. I'll read the rest and give you my comments then.
Chapter 1 is a bumbling fiasco. I'm going to rewrite it, but I don't yet have the time. When I rewrite, I'll split it into two-three chapters. Chapter 1 as it is now, will have several spoilers for the rewritten story. Do beware.
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