I was rather bored, dispirited, and dead inside. I would like to see how my abomination called poetry would fare with the people NUF It's already been a long time since I've stopped casually writing and I'm pondering whether I should pick up the pen once more. But don't hate on me too much Winter Garden Summer springing upon the evening, as the midnight sun kept rising. Wind is blowing with such great force, muzzling her very voice. And quote she were saying, sad words that left a ringing, Ringing in my mind and hearing, “It cannot, I have no choice.” On top this towering stone, where leaves above are rustling. Rustling and swinging, with some gently falling, Dancing in the air, falling beneath two lovers, to connect the two Yet they cannot differ that the gentle smiles were indeed blue. No force of nature, no vines that connect or entangle No flowers that entice, can ever unsever the love that was Yet fate deemed not to be. For it decided that from this angle. The love which was more than love, was never meant for this cause. Is it a gardener’s fault for ever trying? For trying to care for one living, Is not the bloom of roses nor the smile of green enough to rejoice? Nor is his love and tending enough to bring blossom and so hoping? Hope that before the winter’s dawn, the ringing would change, “I can, you’re my choice.” Please don't hit me.
I remembered the twitch streamer Soviet Womble from that poem. I bet you and his bestfriend Cyanide is one in both heart and spirit.
I like the word choice and how you built your stanzas but please fix your couple of spacing error where you forgot to hit the space bar. Poetry is one of those things that any errors and it becomes almost impossible to read and enjoy.
Not that i mean to be rude, but as a psychology student i will tell you that saying stuff like "my abomination called poetry" will make people usually sound less mean, but hate it even more, But the poem is pretty okay otherwise (or is that what i think, MWAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!)
degrading my own work also allows others to degrade it. More criticism just makes me see the flaws better. (is that really what you think? Kekekeke)
First off, i didn't notice your profile pic, but it is amazing, combines two of my favorite things, dank memes and gurren lagann. Second of do people in japan actually laugh kekekek or is it just a weird onomatopoeia like Chinese explosions going *Hong Long long long* Lastly, what I meant was if you ask people not to degrade a work of yours, while undermining it in the process, they speak nicer, but have their actual opinion lowered, so then and there they'll give a nicer review, but will remember it as more horrible than it actually was. It works on similar principle to hype and lack of fulfillment, someone tells you its horrible, but if it actually wasn't, causing you to remember it as more horrible because someone has told you it is horrible and you think "well clearly there is something horrible about it i didn't notice"
I never thought of it that way. I'm harsher on myself anyway. If I wasn't then my drill wouldn't pierce the heavens. Thanks on pointing that out for me.