Cliché or Cliché? Rate my summary? >.<

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  1. PoshMafia

    PoshMafia Well-Known Member

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    So I was reading some of the "here is my setting and prologue, but I am gonna call it a plot do you guys think it is awesome as well? If so you should write it!" threads and figured I would write one as well. Cuz, why not.

    Basic structure this is working from - Hero summoned to another world sub genre.

    This will probably be more summerish, I am not really sure how to write a simplified plot points - probably due tot he fact my understanding of plot remains vague at best.

    Note - gonna avoid using names cuz yeh.

    Walking home from school with 3 of his friends, our main character senses magic that is very similar to magic he had encountered 2 years prior. Summoning magic! Caught by surprise and unable to act in time, our MC and his friends are caught up in the spell and are unable to avoid being summoned.

    So summoned they are to a fantasy world, that our MC was once a legendary hero in. Saving the world from the great Dragon 'Blank' ( cuz no names yeh know) who sought to free itself from its worldly bounds and ascend to godhood.

    Hiding his magical abilities which had never left him, our MC watches in horror as his friends consume a magical drink that contains Dragon's blood. An ingredient that grants the "consumer"? great powers at the expense of their life force the more that they use their powers.

    An affliction our MC is already suffering from.

    After having already escaped from this fantasy world once, our MC knows that he cannot return home anymore, as the method he used to return home causes irrevocable changes to the recipient after one use. ( in other words, you can be summoned as many times as you like, but the way to get home is a one and done kind of deal, unless of course you are summoned to earth which is impossibru!)

    Hiding his power, our main character separates himself from his friends and stages his own death, then sets out in hopes to find a cure, something he failed to do in his previous stint as an amazing hero.

    Meanwhile his friends believing him dead, set out to get revenge, completely blind to what is happening to their bodies.


    Gonna end this "summary" here - I have pretty much worked out everything else in my mind but this post is already to long anyway thoughts thus far? I do b curious.

    Also I intend to write this story as it stands right now. Plz no stealies :p
     
  2. Asf

    Asf 《《The aria of souls》》

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    3/5 by current author standard, its a cliche to follow this route..
     
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    Simon [The Pure One's Chief Steward][Demon Beast]

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    It has a lot of similar setups, it depends on how the story progress will determine if it cliched.
     
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    Indeed.
     
  5. Rivenn

    Rivenn 【I eat fruit】【commonhouseman】【RV_n/Rivelle】

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    Read a few titles with same 'former hero MC', 're-summoned/return to magic world', 'my friends are doomed gotta save them in the shadows' intro.
    Character wise, despite being a former hero, failing to stop his friends from drinking the stuff just because he hides his identity....
    adding that he ran away from that world...
    He sounds naive and cowardly...

    I want to see his actions justified.

    Since that is just a small intro it's still possible to come up with a better and more unique setting.
    Good luck ^^
     
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  6. Kuro no Maou

    Kuro no Maou BABYBABYBABYBABYBABYBABYBABYBABYBABYBABY

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    Why didn't he stop his friends from drinking the dragon's blood?
     
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    NO dragons blood no powers - killed by king. then y not protect, cuz elves. Left a lot fo the reasoning and what not out of the summary.
     
  8. Rivenn

    Rivenn 【I eat fruit】【commonhouseman】【RV_n/Rivelle】

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    This time it sounds like 'trash king who forces the summoned'....
    Welp...
    Sorry the cliche topic just kinda ticks my nerves.
    I'll wait and see.
     
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  9. Asf

    Asf 《《The aria of souls》》

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    Why didnt the king neutralize these otherworlders before granting them power? If Im the king I would atleast puts barrier, neutralized these people with a barrage of 100 or more of long ranged sleep or paralize magic, put slave collors or brainwashed them, before forcing the blood and work them to death as slaves. Before summoning more heroes.. =P
     
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    Rivenn 【I eat fruit】【commonhouseman】【RV_n/Rivelle】

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    sounds like Kuro no Maou intro. -.-
     
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    O.O you read the title right? :p
     
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    Asf 《《The aria of souls》》

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    welp. They already do the kidnapping.. why bother to let loose great powers that could be a potential dangers to the kingdom?
     
  13. Rivenn

    Rivenn 【I eat fruit】【commonhouseman】【RV_n/Rivelle】

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    Lol.
    Well knowing of the cliche elements, you may want to avoid the cliche developments.
    Start a cliche setting, then throwing off the readers with an unseen development...I want to see that (this is the hard part of writing.)
    The summary is cliche so it will be hard attract readers btw
    (just being a little honest here..)
     
  14. PoshMafia

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    Wasn't trying to attract readers this was an off the cuff because I saw so many threads like it.
     
  15. Kuro no Maou

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    Also, why would he risk his life for those two? If they have such a deep relationship you should at least put some backstory.
     
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    summary cough cough - self interest cough cough - there were three cough cough,
     
  17. Kuro no Maou

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    Thanks, that explained absolutely nothing.