Art For my love

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  1. Accidentally

    Accidentally Random Member

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    As the things has been through, As the date has been flew, by the wind.

    Just close your eyes a moment, let your mind rest and let go all the burden, my dear.

    No matter how far you are, i always close by, in your mind or your sky, i present in your heart.

    When the night is cloudy, you still wake and lonely, look up.

    i will be your waning moon. Never will be shroud by the doubt or savy waves.

    When the sun is glaring, covering every road, they are shining and blinding.

    just imagine, i am the shade, i am the cloud, i am the breeze. You will not be lonely.

    When you are in doubt, all the problem is out, you feel like the world have come and againts you.

    Just change the things, you know you can do it. Just stare back and stand tall and still.

    Everything. Has been seen.

    Everything. Has been said.

    You know everything.

    You know what i feel.

    There is nothing i could hide.

    I always be here...

    and always...

    be with you.


    @lavender_drop
     
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  2. Reindeer

    Reindeer RynDeeVuo

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    Your "I"s are not capitalized, Riajuu go explode!!!

    Damnit, I tried reading for the second time before tactical retreat in fear of nausea again.
     
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  3. justmehere

    justmehere Well-Known Member

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    Friendzone alert ....
     
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  4. Gezis

    Gezis 『Maou』

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    Riajuu, explode!

    Bro, you should fix your grammar.
     
  5. Raizhee

    Raizhee who

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    Nice one
     
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  6. MangoGuy

    MangoGuy Rambling Mango

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    things 'has' or have?
    EDIT: nvm..I am guessing this is by someone who is not very good at English after reading the entire thing. but the feels are good!!
     
  7. naghi32

    naghi32 The Loner

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    My love ... i have found and lost you ... all in a single day, now i wander the wastelands, looking for a single speck of dust , to point me in your direction ...
     
  8. Reindeer

    Reindeer RynDeeVuo

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    I suddenly feel like my literary skills are quite lacking for not fully comprehending the, uh, poem.
     
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  9. Accidentally

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    Yep. Grammar is not my good point.
     
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  10. Rreelentless

    Rreelentless Captain Sheriff Admiral Colonel Major General

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    I assume English isn't your first language because the grammar is all over the place and the structure is poorly done with metaphors that aren't really grandiose enough to work well for a sonnet
     
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    Riajuu must detonate boom

    As a loner I cringe and can't read this

    As a human I wish you the best
     
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  12. Rreelentless

    Rreelentless Captain Sheriff Admiral Colonel Major General

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    I'm on phone so in a few hours when I'm at home I'll really deconstruct this and help you re word it
     
  13. Ratatoskr

    Ratatoskr [Aruruu's proud dad] [The False Gentleman]

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    Sounds to me like you're going for share credit.
     
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  14. Ko

    Ko "The Corrupted Queen"

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    How kinky Sweet. >//////<
    Happiness for the both of you.
    >//< *hugs*
     
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    Rreelentless Captain Sheriff Admiral Colonel Major General

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    If this person is ballsy enough to to tag this "art" then it better fucking at least make sense in English
     
  16. Accidentally

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    *bows to all* i am sorry for bad grammar as my mind is kinda muddy because of my health condition.

    I did not make this piece as perfect one nor a things to pick upon.

    I made this lyrics with direct translation. So... one word is not synch with other as they stand alone with their own meaning. *bows*
     
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  17. Kronos

    Kronos Mum's SwagYeti

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    This is how i felt for that hot wings i dropped on the street
     
  18. Enemy

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    I think lavender is pregnant and it's his way of saying sorry for freaking out over the baby but it was nice (y)
     
  19. Arcadia Blade

    Arcadia Blade ༼ つ ◕_◕ ༽つ You can do it!!

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    Waited for an Art about a person dedicated to his love, instead, read a man making a poem for his gf. In a thread where loners would enjoy reading novels. Just give me a gun and end my life...
     
  20. Reindeer

    Reindeer RynDeeVuo

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    Oh, no wonder it felt like it was from a song. Welp, keep at it bruh! I'm sure the effort is what counts.
    I wish you good luck in health and love.