Short Story HOLY CRAP I DID SOMETHING?

Discussion in 'Community Creations' started by Balthazzar, Dec 6, 2016.

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good or not?

  1. Surprisingly good.... seems your not useless afterall

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  2. absolute waste of time

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  3. scary Q.Q

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  1. Alchyr

    Alchyr Master of Procrastination

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    the last line.. replaces.. it was so good until then
    Btw pretty good
    replaces -> replaced
     
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  2. LittleFox21

    LittleFox21 The Soon-to-be famous Nyatsune

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    make it 25k words!
    after being moved to the right subforum i mean
     
  3. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    .......the fuck...
    Id have to start it over, back to before the killing started
     
  4. Westeller

    Westeller Smokin' Sexy Style!! Staff Member

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    Who'd you rip this off of?
     
  5. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    ......... seems like half of the people that said it was a waste of time put down tl;dr
     
  6. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    I FUCKING WROTE IT!.....
    no one on NuF trusts me *sigh*
     
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  7. HavekZero

    HavekZero A well meaning, contributing member of this forum

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    that was my first question.
    great minds think alike my friend
     
  8. hirza

    hirza Mochi Mochi Neko Pan

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    Too bad, Too lazy to read novel today, maybe later. Just voting for now
     
  9. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    its not even a thousand words......
    thats not that long compared to what I usually write
     
  10. FuRen

    FuRen [Lime]

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    But strangely, it was a very catchy tune -> But strangely, the tune is enchanting / the tune attracted him / the tune gave a sense of attraction.

    There was once a jester before me,
     
  11. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    it works either way >_>
    its 1 am....... thx for the help but... my brain currently cant think so.... flowery language not my specialty
     
  12. kenneth223

    kenneth223 『The Weird One』『User who faps to Drinks』 

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    I like the last part, skipped the rest cuz I didn't care lol
     
  13. Satan

    Satan Yes

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    Fag tag
     
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  14. Kysil

    Kysil [Progenitor of Sloth][Sloth Demon]

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    Its both meh and woah

    Meh for not tagging someone (namely me)

    Woah for story and suspense and story

    You could also post it at royalroadl as oneshot(sorry for this but i have also many favorite stories there namely made by andur and vrdraco)

    ill give 5/10 it was ok review
     
  15. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    sure y not
     
  16. Cupcake Ninja

    Cupcake Ninja [Kind Sage][Lord Benevolence][ The Great Paragon]

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    was expecting ero. Was disappointed. You've lost your touch, Bal. Surprisingly fine story, though, so i'll let this pass. You seem to have a bit of talent? Truly, anything is possible these days...
     
  17. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    done
     
  18. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    ......
    if u want ero novel than hit me up an we can work something out..
    but for now, I dont want to get banned
     
  19. Cupcake Ninja

    Cupcake Ninja [Kind Sage][Lord Benevolence][ The Great Paragon]

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    dude. Let's do it bruh. And dont worry. i used to make ero all the time here, 'member? nothing happened. course, that may be cuz i was givin' @Tony a few Cosby Sweaters on the slide.
     
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  20. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    ye ye ye... but I gotta sleep..
    didnt get much sleep yesterday, have to go to scgool in the morning, and its already 2 am
     
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