Poem My World

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  1. Mindless-Genius

    Mindless-Genius Well-Known Member

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    My World

    My world is like a rusty car

    It is like a small jar

    My world is dark and grey

    Where life hunts me like prey

    Still I like my small dark world

    Whether its hot or its cold

    I still like to live in it

    And enjoy it like I never did



    I will live in this world till I die

    I may smile or I may cry

    My world is just like that

    Believe or not I still like it.

    Read this @Shem , @Koalala ,@Smakemdown , @HavekZero , @PKitty ,@Accidentally ,@Baron Carpi @Endofdays42 @briose @Shizukani
     
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  2. Ko

    Ko "The Corrupted Queen"

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    I like it.
    It's good. \o/
    But I have no talent .. >.>
    so ...
    Wait for more opinions!
    \o/
     
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  3. Smaky

    Smaky [A bullied Bunny] [Stalked By LoT(seriously)]

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    I find this relatable with my life.
    I don't know much regarding poetry (I have no poetry sense xD) but I love this poem.
    A beautiful poem. <3
     
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  4. Mindless-Genius

    Mindless-Genius Well-Known Member

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    Its the first poem I have posted and maybe created
    Anyway thanks.
     
  5. Xravia

    Xravia 『Chaos Wizard Of Procrastination 』

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    I may smile, laugh or even cry
    This has a better rhythm, I guess
    The tempo is off after the first couple of lines.
     
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    Xravia 『Chaos Wizard Of Procrastination 』

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    My world is perfectly normal
    Believe it or not it's still adorable
     
  7. Baron Carpi

    Baron Carpi 『Wandering Artist』『Bacon』️⚜️

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    I don't do poetry, but it's nice. (y)

    Like life is not all that great, but you'll still keep living and trying.
     
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    Kaminomikan 神のみ感

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    don't get discouraged even if you heard the harshest words, keep living keep trying.
     
  9. Mindless-Genius

    Mindless-Genius Well-Known Member

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    Thanks I thought it too the first couple lines are out of rhythm

     
  10. Shem

    Shem ┃ᐕ) ⁾⁾「Lv 69 BL Hunter」☆ Vrelty's Seme ♤♡ ꪋς꧖ ☆

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    Naiso *-* did the poem/rhyme yesternight got you? XD I was about to think a poem too but my brain is drained by that XD
     
  11. Hallow Cause

    Hallow Cause Well-Known Member

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    If you like poetry. You might like this.
    CLICK HERE
     
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  12. briose

    briose 『Bri-senpai』 『Boss Lady』

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    in poetry the really good poems have a lot of symbolism inserted in them. But I love it, I have no talent in making poems so it's great that my kouhai can ahahahaha
     
  13. PKitty

    PKitty 『Ash's Master』

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    I enjoy it but I've no poetry talent x.x