Oneshot The Mage's Predicament (Flash Fiction)

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  1. RaGi

    RaGi Well-Known Member

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    The Mage’s Predicament


    The young witch turned her gaze towards the mage, her eyes gazing into his.


    “What are you looking at?” The mage asked.


    “I’m just amazed.” She answered, still looking at him intently with her poker face.


    “Amazed of what?”


    “Of how ugly a person could get.”


    He glanced at the burnt corpse before them. It was a male human that was attacked by the black magician that they were hunting that time.


    “Well, this wouldn’t be the first time you’ll see one after being sent to work at the-” he didn’t get to finish his sentence when she cut him short.


    “No. I meant you.” She said flatly.


    “This brat…” he mumbled before chanting a restoration spell to at least repair the man’s dead body.


    “Tsk. Ugly. So ugly… really.”


    “Can you please not emphasize that word and just assist me? I might give you failing mark, you know?”


    “Yes your Majesty. Even if you’re not good-looking.” She bowed at him exaggeratedly, trying to get into his nerves—which she accomplishes quite brilliantly.
     
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    This is a really interesting oneshot! I wonder what the backstory to them is, aha. Was she being sarcastic at the end or is she really talking to royalty?
     
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    Hmmm... I wonder. Haha!
    Thanks for reading!
     
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    I like this witch and their conversation seems interesting. Are you thinking of continuing this?
     
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    Yes. But the plot is still a mess. I'm still in the process of making it. So, maybe one of these days... if i have the mood. Lol

    Btw, thanks for reading!
     
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    Quite interesting
    Will you continue in the future or no?
     
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    I will continue it... (or start it from the beginning, rather.)
    I'm still working on it.
     
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    Ophious Pathfinder kinda fun

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    Sweet I look forward to reading your work~
     
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    Thank you!

    I'm currently rewriting a one-shot (action/fantasy). I'll post it within this week. (The mage and witch had some exposure in it. Lol. I tend to write crossovers in my own novels.)
     
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    I like it... The sarcasm was nice....
    Please don't embark on a BL route.


    I heard you are a fujoshi.
     
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    It won't. Even if i want to. Haha!

    The witch is a kid. About 7-8 y.o.
    The mage looks like he's in his early 20's...
     
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    Are you aiming for the masses here with the loli route? XD
    wait for a decade or so, okaaay?



    meh it's really fun as a reader to influence the writer.
    PS: Ignore my wishes and write the story you envisioned.
     
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    Haha! No. They are more like a brother/sister. I don't know if i'll add in the romance... but there's a bromance between the mc and some of his friends. Haha! But not a bl... i guess?
     
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    Shounen Ai is just short of BL but I can read them...
    Waiting for more~~
     
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    No... not shounen ai... uhm, but close? Haha! Like frankie and rai (noblesse). I dont know. If it turns out to be a bl, then the better. Since it would be my first. XD
     
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    Got caught up with this thread but ahhh bromance??? Cute lil sister/older brother (wonder if there are any brother complexes/sister complexes/doting older brother lol)?? That's just my cup of tea! When/if you ever get around to posting it please notify me! <:
     
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    Yes. I'll update you then.