Villainess (c2 updated)

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  1. iampsyx

    iampsyx Have some rest, and let's do better tomorrow

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    Author's Note:
    ( ̄▽ ̄)ノ Hello~ This is iampsyx, and I've finally gotten tired of editing this chapter again and again and again and managed to lock my inner critic inside a closet. Actually, this story was supposed to be entitled: 'The Otome Game's Hater Reincarnated as the Villainess', but I realized that a snarky main character with a self-absorbed, cynical POV would be very annoying to write. Well...I still might write it someday, but as for now I'll just practice fighting against writer blocks and my pesky, finicky inner critic with this story as the stage.
    (((c=(°ロ°;q

    Pleasepleaseplease give me criticisms, opinions, comments, ANYTHING that could help me improve (and maybe motivate me as well...). <(_ _)> I don't know when I can update, because thesis and school and my inner critic sucks the life out of me, but I'll do my best!
    ╭( ・ㅂ・)و ̑̑

    Well, uh...enjoy? Have a good day? Um, whatever! *runs off* ε=ε=├┬┴┬┴

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    Title:
    Villainess

    Synopsis:

    Upon learning that a war, caused by the Prince breaking off their engagement and choosing to marry another girl, will lead to the deaths of her parents as well as her own horrific demise in ten years' time, Vya Roess chooses to accept her role as a villainess but at the same time find a way to change the twisted ending fate has written for her.

    Genre:
    Fantasy and...uh...Reincarnation? Politics? I dunno...(sorry)

    Cover art & Chara Design
    (in progress)

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    Table of Contents:

    Chapter 1 - The Villainess and Her Father
    Chapter 2 - The Villainess and Her Mother
     
    Last edited: Oct 12, 2016
  2. CloudySkySadMoon

    CloudySkySadMoon Bald and Beautiful

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    *tear filled eyes* *sniff* Good story. Keep writing. I'll give you a cookie. (*V*)~O
     
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  3. iampsyx

    iampsyx Have some rest, and let's do better tomorrow

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    Yey! A cookie! *noms cookie* Thank you very much! QwQ
     
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  4. arashi-chan12

    arashi-chan12 Well-Known Member

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    Ooohhhh
    I don't see why your inner critic would be so picky on this. It's well written and interesting~ Plus, lots of emotion packed inside. ^o^

    I'll be looking forward to the next!
     
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  5. iampsyx

    iampsyx Have some rest, and let's do better tomorrow

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    My inner critic is a bully ;_;. *blush* Sometimes I wonder whether it's too melodramatic, though...>.>

    Thank you! I'm looking forward to yours as well~ ^^
     
  6. iampsyx

    iampsyx Have some rest, and let's do better tomorrow

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    Chapter 2 is done! Finally...*sighs*

    [My Inner Critic and Me]
    Me: So...what do you think?
    Inner Critic: You write so slow, moron.
    Me: Wha--?! And whose fault do you think that is?
    Inner Critic: Yours, obviously. If only you'd write more than a paragraph every day, then we'd finish a chapter faster.
    Me: But I need breaks! And I try to write more, but you just delete all of my hard work so easily!
    Inner Critic: Don't make excuses. I'm doing my job, and you're the one slacking off.
    Me: Who'd want to work if they're stuck with you? I want another coworker!
    Inner Critic: ...You think I like working with you? You?
    Me: Then just...Just...Get a personality change or something!
    Inner Critic: You're the one who needs to change, not me. Grow up, brat.
    Me: Why you---! Hmp! I'm ignoring you for a week.
    Inner Critic: And then we won't get any work done.
    Me: ...
    Inner Critic: Start on chapter three tomorrow.
    Me: ...Fine. ;_;
     
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  7. Zone Q11

    Zone Q11 『The Gas Mask』『Monochrome Plebeian』

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    1. Did we miss a verb here?
    2. Perhaps this is better?
    3. It's funny. If you had compared me to you, I would be the inner critic myself.
     
  8. iampsyx

    iampsyx Have some rest, and let's do better tomorrow

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    1. Hmm..well, I was going for something like 'the very image of beauty' and just changed it to elegance...I'm not sure...

    2. Yes! That'd be better. Thanks! ^^

    3. ...Huh? Sorry, but I don't get your meaning.

    Thank you for reading the story! :D
     
  9. Zone Q11

    Zone Q11 『The Gas Mask』『Monochrome Plebeian』

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    1. Hm... I see.
    2. Your welcome!
    4. It's a good story, don't push yourself, but keep writing as long as you have that determination!
    3. What I meant is that "the original me" is "the inner critic" while I have another personality which is my "logic". "The weak me" has been sleeping for a long time... we kinda miss him.
     
  10. iampsyx

    iampsyx Have some rest, and let's do better tomorrow

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    3. So...your 'logic' and 'inner critic' are two different personalities? They're kinda integrated for me. And the 'weak you' is a third personality?

    4. Thanks! I'll try my best not to lose my motivation! XD
     
  11. Zone Q11

    Zone Q11 『The Gas Mask』『Monochrome Plebeian』

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    3. There should be many more of me... it's just that... it's complicated. By the way, if you watch Red vs Blue from Roosterteeth, you should get it. ...although it's a messed up animation.
    4. *smiles*
    EDITED 3. Oh! I know, try this;
    Perhaps this will help your story?
     
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  12. iampsyx

    iampsyx Have some rest, and let's do better tomorrow

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    3. I haven't watched that yet, sorry.
    3. (5?) ...I...think that if I had more active personalities ('cause most of them are passive), nothing's gonna get done. They'd all go off doing their own thing and my Inner Critic/Planner/Manager/Slave-driver Boss/Personality-who-gets-the-other-personalities-to-work would get too distracted...
     
  13. Zone Q11

    Zone Q11 『The Gas Mask』『Monochrome Plebeian』

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    No problem. We gotta go. Good luck!
     
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  14. yuzuki

    yuzuki [sweet night] [plum blossoms]

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    Ahhh the characters are so compelling! I love it! Especially the mother, right now. xD I can't wait to read more.
     
  15. A5G_Reaper

    A5G_Reaper [DCLXVI, sohyee, and iampsyx's cute imouto]

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    Saved the page. Imma look for some part to horribly bash tomorrow.
     
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  16. iampsyx

    iampsyx Have some rest, and let's do better tomorrow

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    Ikr? I think the Mother's the best chara. XD Thanks for reading~ ^^

    ...Uh...well...criticisms are good too...I-It's not like I'm a masochist, okay? I-It's just that my Inner Critic says it's better to have more people who can help her with her job!! >.<
     
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  17. A5G_Reaper

    A5G_Reaper [DCLXVI, sohyee, and iampsyx's cute imouto]

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    If your sentence have more than two comma, consider rearranging it.
     
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  18. iampsyx

    iampsyx Have some rest, and let's do better tomorrow

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    ...But I like commas! >n<
     
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  19. A5G_Reaper

    A5G_Reaper [DCLXVI, sohyee, and iampsyx's cute imouto]

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    B*tch I'll put YOU in a comma

    You did it quite well, but it's still kinda awkward. Especially since it's in the first sentence, making me consciously looking for others.
     
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  20. iampsyx

    iampsyx Have some rest, and let's do better tomorrow

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    (。•́︿•̀。)

    Reading it again...it does seem weird...I might rewrite it in the future, after I'm done writing the first draft. XD
     
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