path in life

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Walking on this floor slowly
the door opens slightly
the ceiling gives the feeling
of pressure and worry :notlikeblob:

more we near the door
more she appears accessible
it's irremediable
to want to reach her :blobReach:

but reach this door.
does it's really our wish?
crossing this door
can be bored

so in front of her.
what do we want?
to take her despite all? :blobhero:

if you take a step back
and look around
for another path

you would see others than her

slap your cheek
made your mind,
choose your way,

what happens at any time
it's what makes you
not similar at someone

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so here I have compared life at a floor with many doors
the ceiling is the problem and the door is the goal/path in life we have.

for this, in my mind I have thought of people who do work they don't like
but if they look and think they can do what they want.

oh! and here a pic of the situation~~
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    1. yun yun yun Aug 16, 2018
      *yawns*

      Nice try...

      About the grammar, guess can't help it since not everyone's fluent in the language...

      Though I cringe when I 'hear' terrible English...
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    2. amilhs Aug 16, 2018
      *cough*
      :blobangel:
    3. amilhs Aug 16, 2018
      *cough*
      I have a perverted thoughts reading this poem..my thoughts escalated when i saw the pic at the end of the poem...the opened door is the "c.r."..xD
      hehehe
    4. Pandamonic Aug 16, 2018
      @lil Hir yep mucb better now. Good job.
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    5. Pandamonic Aug 16, 2018
      >.> I don't really care with the proper usage of grammar and stuff, but can you check your work and clean some of them. Don't do stuff at the expense of your grammar. And I love the words you have used like literary.
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    6. RTS Aug 16, 2018
      Nice try!:blobhighfive:
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