Hero: The Story of Nobody

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1. Bad Storm Jun 13, 2019

   @Bielt those are some nice good points. Thank you~
   
   Personally I had an easier time writing it all in one go. Before doing some editing. Helps me keep the cohesiveness. But the trouble I had was the flow progression (?) so I needed to do some rearranging and even cut the stanza where I did.
   
   I actually tried to center "In this life"... I didn't like how it doesn't seem to fit in either poem! It's like seeing a misaligned domino in the center...
2. Bielt Jun 13, 2019

   @Bad Storm the poem is really good!
   I specially like the nobody side as it's pretty deep and it touched some points which many people feel or has already felt~
   Really good
   
   About both together they are really good hero part managed to increase the depth of the feelings of nobody's side because they contrast each other so much~
   
   @SummerForest XD
   
   Well I am not that great at it myself~
   And the process of creation of that kind of poem is quite heretic~
   
   I think that making both poems have the same level of deepness is really hard and the main obstacle on the writing process
   
   Besides that I personally like to separate poems with this style of play into 2 divisions based on what you intent it to pass.
   
   1st is contrast, when you want them to increase the deepness of each other but not exactly interact with each other
   I believe this one fall into it and must say it was done superbly~
   The biggest issue on writing this type of poem is that sometimes the contrast doesn't work both ways~ so it makes it look like that one side is only there to support the other.
   
   
   The 2nd divisions is interaction, when you want them to be able to be read separated or together, be it in the form of a conversation or as complement of each other.
   This type is very complex because you want to actually make not 2 poems but 3, the lines need to make sense alone and with the line of the other poem mixed in.
   What I can give as tip is to rewrite, and use thesaurus or other dictionaries as much as possible~
   
   What I normally do is to make up an general idea for the 3 poems and what I want them to pass, then I start to write one side while already thinking of the other, I normally work with 3 pages open, 1 for each side and one for the mixed version.
   And whenever I add a line I put it on the mixed version to see how it will get.
   I usually start writing only 1 but fastly end writing both sides at the same time, cause it's important to not forget any idea for lines you get~
   
   After having both sides looking good, I focus on the mixed version and start to alter the wording and even the position of each line to make the flow better (this part is where I use thesaurus the most since I usually need to find more ambiguous words for many lines), but it's also Important to keep checking the separate version to see if their meaning are still good~
   
   
   Another tip I can give is that you really should abuse but tools while making the layout of the poem~
   How the poem is delivered is really important for any of the 2 types~
   It can alter the flow of reading~
   
   For example on your poem you could have put the line "in this life" which appears in both sides, on the center of the page and not change it's color.
   That way it would appear in either nuf theme, and it could give the sense that the poems have a deeper interaction since there would be no need to place the same line two times on the blog~
   ^^)/

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3. Bad Storm Jun 12, 2019

   @SummerForest Maybe next time. I've finished this one already xD

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4. SummerForest Jun 12, 2019

   It's a nice one. Loved it. Asking for tips from @Bielt is a good idea. Go on~

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