Night Land

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Pandamonic

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Dancing through the edge of the night,
Up above the black starless sky,
Circling at the waning moon,
Laughing because I'm so high.
Careful with the frizzy light,
And witness how a rock illuminate
Instantly and forever, across
The land of which I perspire,
And there lies a special dome
The thing I called home.


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@Bad Storm I'm not comfortable writing this kind of poem but I think I did well this time.

A poem about how I imagine my night.

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    1. Bad Storm Aug 21, 2018
      @Pandamonic ... It's all a matter of taste. Just write what you want haha.

      I'm not afraid of unfamiliar words, humans have this amazing invention called dictionary lol.
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    2. Pandamonic Aug 20, 2018
      @Nad Storm I'll try writing a bit more daring than these and I might bring out the big guns (Unfamiliar words). I'm still a little hesitant when I wrote this cause im thinking too much because it lacks order unlike my regular ones.
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    3. Bad Storm Aug 20, 2018
      I see. Nice thought! I really liked the flow.

      Agreed. The setting is one of the component I have a trouble with. Because you need to find that balance between ideas and proper imagery so that it won't come off as something most can't understand/relate.
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    4. Pandamonic Aug 20, 2018
      @Bad Storm it feels ephemeral. The last few lines was me comming down to Earth cause even immortals fall or something along that line of thought. And writing something like a fantasy like this take challenge and creativity specially when picking the right words.
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    5. Bad Storm Aug 20, 2018
      For a moment, I thought you'll rhyme all the way haha. I think it is good. Especially the start. (because I got confused with the last two lines)

      Just for say, how was the experience of writing about something not so concrete and has a dash of fantasy?

      Edit:... I didn't see that home thing before I made this comment. And you're home is shaped like a dome?
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    6. Pandamonic Aug 20, 2018
      Well if you would look at the punctuations you can see that thy are a different idea from each other. @XiaoYun
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    7. yun yun yun Aug 20, 2018
      *yawns*

      I know...
      Just that, when those two lines are aligned, it gives a different meaning...

      (To me...)
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    8. Pandamonic Aug 20, 2018
      @XiaoYun nope, but that was an intended misunderstanding. It just means that I'm so high in the sky literaly and the light means lightning, Lol.
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