So, the paragraph below is a synopsis for a novel I want to try to write. please check if the grammar is ok. Our story starts with people that were travelling to Florida but as they were heading towards their destination they were hit by a storm in midway and had to reroute from the middle of Bermuda triangle, but they soon found themselves in the unknown world so what's gonna happen now was something they never imagined. Thank you for reading
You should use punctuations, Change 'that were travelling' to 'who were traveling' ( just a single 'l' in traveling') You should use 'an unknown world', not 'the unknown world'. It's better to change the word 'reroute' to something else.
Rewrite suggestion: Our story begins with a group of friends/strangers flying to Florida. Their routine trip turned ominous when their plane ran into a storm while passing through the Bermuda Triangle. When they escaped the strange storm, they were surprised to find themselves in an unknown world! What happens next was something none of them could have imagined.
Our story starts with people that were traveling to Florida but as they were heading towards their destination they were hit by a storm. Their lives were in danger and to save themselves they had to pass right through the infamous Bermuda triangle. Once the skies cleared they were in an unknown world. What would happen next was something they never imagined. This is a suggestion and there might be mistakes. It may also not have the same connotation as what you aspired to give.
Punctuation is free. It costs $ dollars to use, no need to be stingy. Here, a gift: ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, Take these commas and make full use of them.
First, ignore these people because they will say nothing except negative things and you're asking in the wrong place If you want to write something and you like doing that so why are you asking
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