Poem WWW Poem Competition - Submission Thread

The Red Shadow

icon: Santa

All around the world,
A fat man jumps into homes.
Ninja of Christmas.

 

Title:
Winter

Icon:

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Winter hit us again
Like an ongoing trend
Keeping us on the mend
Instead of on the bend

Wind ice breezy
Making it easy
Helping cheesy lines
Clear our minds

We step up again with the thrill
Can't hold back our fill from the ice cold chill

Look right for the winter wonder land
Stop pass for the sprites of the mass
Like a cold hard glass
Keeping us glad for the past instead of making it last

Campsite here, we will stay all night
Until at last the light clears the night.

 

Title: Snowflake
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she is here when cloud cover the sky
little sparkle falling from the height
cold shiver my skin when she touches
yet she is gentle as feather

 

Icon: Presents

A gift given, a gift wasted.

Cradling the remains of a ruined box,
Unravelling the unmarred and untouched.
The present in sight and yet to be seen,
A yawning maw of formed desire.

Blue strands wrapped a blue box,
Grey walls surrounding a grey gift.
Perfect intentions vibrant with life,
Dead in hands of intended flaws.

Despair came, mind waned;
Silence followed, heart stilled.
Intentions made, mind read;
Vibrance crafted, heart wasted.

A given gift, a wasted gift.

 

First time I saw you
I was but a child
Shy to others but not to you
I walked closer, up to you
I moved my fingers, to your face
Fixing your eyes, I build a smile
How pretty you are, my friend of ice

Spoiler: author note

Sorry, I didn't use enough time for this poem

 

Gifts by @Loni4ever
Theme chosen: bluebow
lol jk it's the gift XD

Isn't there something strange about gifts?
Just hearing that word, things come to mind:
A scarf, a ring, perhaps a book?
No matter what, they're the physical kind.

Yet of all the things you can receive,
How come a hug brings the most relief;
Why is it a smile makes the world look bright;
Just being with someone is the biggest delight?

Cause all of these are precious gifts.
Just look a while and you'll recognize them.
You'll come to see your blessings
Clear as day as your perspective shifts.

For everything that I receive,
For everyday I am alive,
For all the merry hours shared,
I'm grateful when I realize
That all these things are in some way gifts.

No matter where, you will see gifts
To appreciate and be grateful for,
To love; and as this feeling lifts
You up into the highest skies,
You'll understand there's so much more
In life than you had thought before.

There's moments when I rest and doze,
There's chances to fulfill my goals,
There's time to read and time to play,
And through it all, make my own way.

There's many gifts, and the biggest of all
Is life itself, which I didn't ask for.
And though sometimes it's hard and sometimes it hurts,
There's other times too when I'm jumping with joy.
All the things I can be, all the things I can do,
For all of those gifts, I want to thank you. <3

Spoiler: Author notes

Shoutout to my creators lolol

 

Thank you for your participation!
The submission period of WWW Poetry Competition is now closed!

The polls for the most favourite poem is now open and will continue to be open until December 27th, 2019~

Vote for your favourite poem​

Submissions:

1. Cooked Turkey by @Vilidious
2. Poetic Yandere: Frozen in Time by @zhainan2157
3. Ornaments by @Anra7777
4. Untitled by @scriptor
5. Snow by @Lurking
6. Snowflake by @KUROz
7. Bell by @LNOnlineOtaku
8. Christmas by @andykhang
9. Mistletoe by @Nyann
10. Shit, Is It Cold Outside by @Evil_Ginger
11. Christmas Cheer by @Simon
12. You're next @Pyoo by @Nurman
13. Kindled Together by @BB_Tensei
14. @Pyoo @Pyoo by @LysUltima
15. Untitled by @AMissingLinguist
16. The Red Shadow by @Sunlight_Brother
17. Winter by @udonsage
18. Snowflake by @strikegunner
19. Untitled by @NZPIEFACE
20. Untitled by @Siostar
21. Gifts by @Loni4ever

Judging will be done from December 21st, 2019 to December 27th, 2019 with the awards handed out on January 1st, 2020.
Judges: @Pyoo @Osamaru @Nargol

Come and watch the discussion thread for more info on the other events!

Note:
Because holiday icons would be gone by the time of announcement, the prizes are changed as below:
Prizes:
1st: 2,000 Nuffies + Star icon for a day (or other 300 Nuffies/week icon for a week)
2nd: 1,000 Nuffies + 300 Nuffies/week icon for a week
3rd: 500 Nuffies + 300 Nuffies/week icon for a week
Fan Favourite: 500 Nuffies + 300 Nuffies/week icon for a week

*Anyone can upgrade to rebel icons for a day

Spoiler: Submissions

 

Poll is broke. (It wasn't me, I'm innocent)

 

It looked fine on my end
https://www.strawpoll.me/19114130

Anyone else have issues???

 

Might be my end then, maybe something with adblocker?
https://media.discordapp.net/attach...37267679232/unknown.png?width=1221&height=687

 

so it didn't even show up for you?

Not sure if this helps but mine shows up. Not sure if there's an issue with the voting itself cause I haven't voted yet

 

My vote went through. o/

 

I do. I can't vote, the option doesn't get ticked

 

I love how 3 different poems are about the pings.

 

Dunno how to fix this..

My ping list is just awesome liek tht

 

My favorite poem because that is what I wish to tell the whole world. It is what I long for everyone to keep when thinking about death and also to support my fluffy clean white loni

 

aww~ hahaha <3

 

Putting this here congratulations @Anra7777

 

Poem Contest Results​

Boy, am I glad I named the contest Winter Writing War, instead of Christmas Competition!

1st Place: Ornaments by @Anra7777
2nd Place: Gifts by @Loni4ever
3rd Place: You're next @Pyoo by @Nurman and Shit, Is It Cold Outside by @Evil_Ginger
Fan Favourite: Ornaments by @Anra7777

Congratulations to the winners!

Judging Results:

Comments:
AMissingLinguist
Points for creativity I suppose, but I didn't particularly like it.
*facepalm* That was the most creative ad I've ever seen....
Didn't expect that! Well I had fun!
andykhang
Lower score for theme is because although he chose the giftbox, and spoke of christmas, he never mentions gifts at all.
I enjoyed this one a bit.
My head....
I actually like it. It doesn't fit the theme, but if I disregard the theme, you tell the message quite well, conveying that boring tediousness, which we sometime doesn't want to admit is fun.
Anra7777
QAQ Awwww, this one made me sad. If I had to sight anything, it might have flowed better if it was in Prose instead of Verses. Good Job.
I really enjoyed it. There were no breaks in immersion, the story it tells is clear, it follows the theme very well and in a creative way, and it tells a personal story.
BB_Tensei
It's nice, but did not hit me personally. The rhymes feel a bit stunted and short when I read it to myself, leaving me a bit stifled. This is the main reason that although I like some of the rhymes, the score for flow is lower.
I like it. The way you do the theme is nice and steady.
Evil_Ginger
Starts out amusing, but bitter, and ends happily. Cold being used to demonstrate his loneliness and struggle to find love is also well done.
Cheeky, nicely done
KUROz
A little wordy, but not bad. You might have seen better flow if you'd chosen a Different format though.
Lot of ambition in this one. But it is choppy and a bit hard to read in general. Didn't do it for me.
It's a nice story, told articulately
LNOnlineOtaku
I like linking the bell with notifications, but other than that, it's just alright.
I actually like fun poems like this
Loni4ever
Very sweet, and very much in the spirit of Christmas. There isn't much to interpret, which seems pretty common to these poems, but I think Loni does what he wants to do quite well.
Good! Though it might have worked better in Prose
my favourite serious one, like what you do for theme & how present that too
Lurking
Not bad, you captured the theme well, but the flow is really choppy. Could use some more polishing.
I like it! But the cleverness of it is offset by the choppy flow, which is why I'm not rating it that highly.
LysUltima
Simple, but amusing. Short and easily read.
XD Poor Burdie.
The theme isn't projected well, but the flow is nice. If I won why are you preparing your fist Dx
Nurman
Hilarious! There really isn't much to explain, but I still want to mention that last line. It really elevates the poem to me into something much funnier than it would have been otherwise.
*looks at Pyoo and Drools*
Clearly it doesn't fit the theme, what does this Pyoo have to do with the theme
Nyann
There's some problems with the grammar making things flow a bit poorly, but overall I like it. I got to feel both sadness and happiness in one poem, and even though the setup is classical and has been done many times before, it was done well.
It was hard to understand the message, I understand your story but it felt like there is no underlying theme to it (other than the mistletoe theme). Usage of the mistletoe theme was very clear
NZPIEFACE
For a poem that you can get the gist of immediately just from the first line, the rest of the poem is a lot of work to read. I'm finding it difficult to put into words what I have a problem with in the poem. I think it's creative enough, the entire thing matches the theme perfectly, and there is nothing jagged or strange about the flow.
I guess it was just not for me.
Hmmm *pat pat*
Don't get it
scriptor
Pretty good! Though It feels like there is suppose to be 1-2 more stanzas to it.
"sand" and "hourglass stand" is a very nice rhyme. I like it, and did find it a bit clever, but it did not personally hit me.
Without the theme descriptor, it's kinda hard to get the theme
Simon
I've had problems interpreting this poem. I can't really seem to see what it's about. I talked with Pyoo about it, and asked her opinion. What I saw was a man sending off a woman who he'd had a horrible relationship with. It was a theme I found particularly strange, and made even more so by how unnaturally cheery the man seems to be.
Pyoo mentioned it might be more of a liberated feeling. Like a husband sending off his wife to her relatives, and him now being free to do what he wants for a while. Even then, though, I feel like that would be an overly sad thing.
If the author had some other intent, I just can't see it.
Short but sweet.
The use of bell as cheer is nice. It's simple and easy to understand
Siostar
Sweet and enjoyable. Though having three out of seven lines end with the word "you" is a bit lazy.
XD awww, that one's pretty cute.
Simple and nice, heartwarming
strikegunner
Average. Not much more to say.
*thumbs up*
cute, nice
Sunlight_Brother
Short and amusing.
XD Hahhahahaaha! A Santa Haiku. I love it.
udonsage
Good, but it kinda felt like you gave up half way.
It has a very nice flow to it. Very smooth. It's cheery and optimistic, making the reader feel a bit more upbeat.
It's a very nice work.
Vilidious
Good form for the length, but doesn't feel like a lot of effort was put into it.
Made me laugh, and is a bit clever.
I don't see the relation to the theme
zhainan2157
Not bad, captured the Yan feel well, but the Flow was choppy.
Clever. Fails a bit in the last few lines, but I like it.
I like the heat and cold thing

 

The comments are by you, @Nargol and @Osamaru, right? Are they always in order, and if yes, what is the order? owo