Like the title says, I've made a video story. Would you mind watching and giving your honest opinions about it?? Did you like it?? Was it interesting?? Character dynamics?? Are you curious to know more??
I used to be so into VN like this before.. This is pretty well made, but I would suggest that the dialogue to be kept shorter in each dialogue boxes, especially when the visual didn't change for a long time. You can split the dialogue into more dialogue boxes, so that they're easier to read, or just add some changes to the visual of the characters each time they speak. For example, in the Monster Girl Quest (its NSFW so google it at your own discretion), sometimes there's also a lot of explanation by the characters, so those explanation are split between few boxes, and when the one explanation is long, the character visual will change. The character visual in the video did change during the maid long talk, but just barely changing.
Oh also, the story seems to be slow life, this kind of stories requires a lot of visual changes, because of the reason i stated before.