Comments on Profile Post by Gandire Alea

I saw that title earlier on SH front page

and I bet you ignored it~

Lol.... But will read it

I can't even do proper romance

I still have that tab open.
I saw that it was a long read so, i left it for later

... I finished it.... And it feels like everything is messy... And I think it'll take a quite a bit of effort to make the story work.... I still don't get the Shana's goal.... Tho it's revealed in later chapter(probably)...
And those comedy regarding bras you've tried to do are not that much funny actually.....

... does that feels offensive???

That was more of a plot point than a comedy. It makes much more sense later why that was impactful to shana.

Plot point I see.....

From what I picked up from Bad Storm's notes, it's something that really won't make sense until closer to the end of the story.

Yes I also thought that....
And the story is too much messy now... Like How the world is....where the seemstobe protagonist is from.... And that twin sister thing.... Although all of them can't be fit into first chapter... But I feel like that first chapter should've been a less messy...

does it keep you curious to keep reading??

Yup and that's the reason I've read it till the end... But nothing is explained and it feels like it's getting a lot more messed up

You can blame Bad Storm for not having written the rest of it yet. But I would call that a success more than I would messy. It did keep your reading~
good job Stormy~

so weird that the story does not feel like my writing and I have no recollection of the plot as well. And this is better fleshed out than the ones I do since I like short stories more than novel-length ones.

Bad Storm might need to see a doctor