/o/ Here you go, @Pyoo! (tags @Action too!) I tried something a bit different with this one! Lets see how long it takes to figure it out! ..... >.> honestly, might not be to long, I'm not sure How it works on Phone..... Rather than "Impulsive" itself, I went with something that showed a LACK of Impulsiveness! Tell me what you think! I think it could use some polish, but I like how it turned out. Chances I see her there everyday, and I wonder why I see him there everyday, and I wonder why Why she would smile, at such a man as I. Even when I smile, he never says Hi. But even still, I feel my heart begins to pound But even still, His blazing eyes, my words confound As Her smile dims the world, and drowns out all the sound. and In their heat, I find mine own slip to the ground. And as we draw closer, with each step we take. And as we draw closer, with each step we take. I can't help but think if the smiles fake. and I feel my heart begin to shake So in silence, She passes me by. Thus in silence, He passes me by. In my heart, I can't help but sigh. And I feel like I want to cry. Maybe if I'd read between the lines Why couldn't I just step out of the lines Maybe if I'd only seen the signs Why couldn't we just speak our minds? Maybe if I'd thought to ask, Why couldn't I put down the mask? I wouldn't have to say Goodbye... I don't want to say Goodbye...
Great! I really like that style~ Playing with the lines like that~ >u<)/ Reminds me of the one I wrote long ago~ I wish I could write more poems like that~ But they are soooo hard to write!
orz, Ya, this one was kinda hard, more so since I wasn't sure if I wanted both parts to sync up and flow together, or have their own rhythm and pace.
Ayee! It's like~ You need to first write 2 poems~ Than you need to crop and edit them to make a third when they match! It's really hard! >.<)/
I really like this poem, it’s beautiful! It really hits me hard, ‘cause it reminds me of the romantic situation I’m in right now - it’s now my favourite poem~
Really beautiful! Reminds me of those sweet romantic poems from the Romantic era I used to love to read I just love it!
I like tgat you decide to rhyme them whoch is difficult, and tht you adaoted your theme to your idea But where is your theme Dx
OOOH! Poetry! *Picks up the maruuuuuuuuuuuun* Since when were you a poet! And what ryhmes with orange!
Both are beautiful... So... Is the one in black the man's pov and the one in white the woman's? (Or else I am getting BL flags lol)
lol, Ya, The Woman is in white. More Specifically, the Black words represent a Man who's not afraid to speak up, but is unsure and skeptical. While the White words represent the opposite; a woman who knows what she wants, but is to afraid to "step out of the lines" and take the risk.