Resolved (CN) Please help me TLC another phrase

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  1. Playful Devil Miki995

    Playful Devil Miki995 [Happy go lucky~]

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    君临天一时间竟然不知道如何开口。这一刻,她竟然感觉到眼前的女子是如此的陌生,也让他的心底产生一阵酸楚……
    Please select a choice from the three options below:

    1) Jun Lin Tian was momentarily lost for words. His daughter that was currently standing before him seemed really foreign, grievance filled his heart…

    2) Jun Lin Tian was momentarily lost for words. His daughter that was currently standing before him seemed really foreign, making him feel forlorn…

    3) Your version xD

    Cheers~ and thanks!
     
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    Delusion Dark lord

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    Jun lin tian was momentarily at loss for words. His daughter, who was currently standing before him seemed very distant, making him feel forlorn....
     
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    Vemmy Well-Known Member

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    Out of curiousity, Jun Lin Tian is a man right?
    "Jun Lin Tian was momentarily lost for words. He unexpectedly felt that the girl currently standing before him was really foreign, making him feel forlorn..."
    I tweaked it a little~
     
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    Playful Devil Miki995 [Happy go lucky~]

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    Jun Lin Tian is the father of the girl. I did change up the words a little as I don't want too many 'feel' in the sentence ^^ I learned not to repeat word in a sentence from my editors.
     
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    Vemmy Well-Known Member

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    Don't you love typos in the original text XD
     
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