Gonna kick gods ass

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  1. Deep

    Deep NO TITLE

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    everyone just criticize this kay
    A high schooler living his ordinary life by reading every goddamn novels animes mangas etc
    he hates the gods (he thinks gods aren't paying attention to world )so he decides to go against the gods
    everyone from his friends to family just scolds him for having his idea
    so one day he was lazily browsing over the topic supernatural occurrence all around the world
    he finds an interesting topic''demons are good guys''he clicks and reads it
    from their he found methods to call demons to help and decides to keep in mind one just in case
    days later
    in school he drawings of various styles in the hands of all of his friends
    to go with the flow he also decides to draw one
    so he while thinking what to draw in his minds an image appears and a voice asking him to draw that one his hands not knowing whats happening he draws that image
    during the class he felt a strange felling coming off from his hands
    he dint paid any attention to it
    during the class the teacher saw the drawings in the hands of students and scold everyone of theme
    fearing this our mc tries to rub of the drawing(it was drawn using a pen)
    but alas no matter what he did he couldn't remove it
    then the teacher was coming to his direction soon the bell rang (final bell)
    then teacher went out
    soon everyone went home
    so does our mc one the way he noticed something off with the drawing
    he felt that the drawing was was absorbing the sun light he felt his hands ha was burning taking water from this bootle he washed his hands and felt revived when he turn around he saw surrounding people were noticing him rushed his way back home
    after taking a shower he sat before the his study table to study
    then he noticed that the drawing was not gone he decided to leave it alone
    then after having his dinner he went to sleep
    during his sleep he was dreaming and during his dream
    ''ah finnaaalyyy ............after who knows how much year i back''a figure was saying this to him.
    who are u ?
    ''ME well call me anything u like there is no meaning in my name''
    wait don't tell me that ur some gods rival or shit
    ''oh .....you seem to know understand it very fast ''
    oh come on I might have read too much novels and started to seeing things yep i am broken
    ''don't worry what ur seeing is true i am the brother of the god mr.PICC...what was it again damn it ''
    wait is it piccolo?
    "yes that's it am i that famous ?''
    no its not u but someone else
    ''oh i see nevermind that did u feel anything strange today''
    STRANGE everything was fukking strange everyone drawing images in their hand,my image is just sticked to my hands and now i talking to someone no some thing who claims to gods brother what the f**** is going on ??
    ''wait cool down its was all destiny ''
    destiny?oh come one don't say that i am a part of big legacies like meng hao
    "meng hao who is that ?"
    oh he is my great demon sealer of a book IISTH
    ''a character from a book ?''
    yep my favorite wish I was like him.nevermind that whats this destiny crap
    ''don't u fell gods aren't caring anyone''
    yes
    ''have u ever felt to make the god to kneel before you''
    yep
    ''dont u understand there is something off with u ''
    No.Its just my feelings there may different people with this type of feelings
    ''well....if u think like that ...then''
    cut the chase what do u want
    ''please participate in the next god choosing ceremony representing me''
    thats all?
    "yes please u see that brother of mine made a bet with me
    i loosed in it and thus he sealed me in a drawing
    after pleading he said that one day a boy will come and help u out''
    I understand kk but why should i go to cermony ?
    ''well all my powers are now bestowed upto u that was a condition by my brother ''
    oh well i will help u
    ''thank you i will be ur side until u reach the god standards for participating ''
    There are standards ?
    ''yes nothing high though we will discuss it tomorrow''
    kk how can i call u
    ''i will always be with u''
    stop with the lovers quotes
    (thus my wish to kick god ass is going to be fulfilled)







    me
    well how was it a plane one right i was just killing my time
    just say something about (its my first time)
    thx:):):):)
     
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  2. Suijin

    Suijin Blood God [Medic]

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    was this supposed to be a scary story? a gag? what?
    the plot is lame, reading occult leads him to draw something that never vanishes yet he acts all "meh" about it? the first thing that would happen would be that the kid would panic after a while and go to check this shit out. if not, parents would find out and make him go to the hospital to check this shit out. and so the story of medical examination begins and such.. plot ruined
     
  3. Rivenn

    Rivenn 【I eat fruit】【commonhouseman】【RV_n/Rivelle】

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    ...Continue...
    I'm reading.
     
  4. Asf

    Asf 《《The aria of souls》》

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    Just random
     
  5. Deep

    Deep NO TITLE

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    yep just random came to mind and i post it that's all ;)
     
  6. Deep

    Deep NO TITLE

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    well its just a start explanation is about to come after it
     
  7. Wildzhen

    Wildzhen Well-Known Member

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    why did you capitalize the thread Title ? other than that I did not really get what you wanted to say with this. (hope it was not a joke I hate to be that guy who never gets the joke)

    Edit: Just saw your previous post so okay I will wait for the follow up.
     
  8. superposhposh

    superposhposh Well-Known Member

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    It's shite
     
  9. honglath

    honglath I miss my PC

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    It's dumb. Make the teacher a sexy, big-boobed onee-san and the mysterious voice a sadistic naked loli and you'll make millions.
     
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  10. Phoenix

    Phoenix Nameless Wanderer 『WW Vet.』

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    I skipped from around a quarter in to a quarter to the end and still not interested to read the part I skipped. Fix the capitalization and paragraph structure and I might read it
     
  11. Suijin

    Suijin Blood God [Medic]

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    THE TRUTH HAS BEEN SPOKEN!!!
     
  12. Arcturus

    Arcturus Cat, Hidden Sith Lord

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    So this is barely even the beginning of an idea. There needs to be a lot more groundwork/ ideas put in for the idea to be even remotely interesting.
     
  13. Scarecrow

    Scarecrow > dev/null

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    Random thought:
    I was expecting that he would drop the soap bar during the shower. He picked up the soap. And then the devil appear. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

    Ayy don't get me wrong, what I meant was that when he picked up the soap. He kneel with one knee and ends up completing the pact because the posture was taken as his intent to show his loyalty and will to serve the demon.

    Therefore don't get me wrong. The punchline wasn't surprise anal but surprise bj.
     
  14. arjun pandit

    arjun pandit Well-Known Member

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    write...I'm reading