Your previous one is way more horrible,no,precisely speaking,that one want worthy to be called a poem
Tsundere "Baka, I hate you!" Fists come flying for your face Pow, smack, thwap, kick, kiss. Yandere "You love me," she sighs, Fingers trailing, curling close "You only love me." Dandere "S-s-senpai, please?" "Can you help me get that book?" Bright eyes and a blush. Kuudere Silent in your arms, Her cold eyes tell you, Let go As her heart pounds fast. Himedere "Princess," you say but-- "I'm not your princess," she frowns. "I'm just yours." Ba-thump. Based on definitions taken from this site. Ah sorry, I'm not good with writing dark things. :-0 Have fluff instead~ *coughs* Maybe you can imagine them all getting rejected or something.
And now, in reverse. Tsundere "Baka, I love you!" Hands reach towards the one who leaves. Stomping, yelling, silence. Tears. Yandere "You love me?" she snarls, Fingers curling round the corpse "Then you should've stayed." Dandere A hundred pages Of romance read all alone Dull eyes and a sob. Kuudere Silent in your arms, Her cold eyes say, I'm sorry As her heart bleeds out. Himedere "Princess," you say but-- "I'm not your princess," she frowns. The door slams. Get out.
Y You don't have rhyme at all,you know?meaning also,I didn't even get what you wrote,what's up with that?
*shrugs* It said rhyme/poem rather than rhyming poem in the first post. It's okay if you don't get it, I'm sure there will be those who do. : ) (Lol)
Eh, he gave me his opinion as you requested, I responded to his comments, now we're basically even. No need for a fight after that.
Your title doesn't suit you, My rhyme wasn't gotten rid off Get the body Of yours outside And wait for me to beat you Satisfied?
Edited:Your title doesn't suit you, My rhyme hasn't been rid off Get the body Of yours outside And wait for me to beat you Satisfied?(2) Even though I felt it isn't right I just couldn't get a good rhyme*pouts*