Making a novel with free sense

Hello guys i am new to this and new to writing novel and English is not my native language but i am trying to make novel and many more connecting to the main series and this 1 is also the side story of my main novel but i can say this is my experiment before i write the original plot novel So please i need your help and idea's and views about how am i doing with my writing.?

Please lead me to my ultimate destination.
will be enjoying all of your time with me guys.

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To read or not to read, there is no story.

 

First things first.
Pls learn to add some commas and periods.
Reading your 1 whole sentence post is making me breathless.


P. S. It's potential. Might wanna change that

 

Tell the story is about what first before asking opinion.

 

i feel like about commas and dot like snake in sands.

 

i just make a post to have some basic idea's of how i run my train on track hehe and i will try to release my work daily or some time 2 a day so it will understandable very fast.

 

The side stories in the death mage are bloody amazing.

Also PoV chapters are amazing if you do them right.

Sometimes the side chapters are shit sometimes they are amazing it depends on your efforts.

For example there is a filter (I know side chapters aren't fillers) of one pice that is truly amazing it's when they fall from sky island into a marine fort.

 

side stories? pfff

Let us talk about extra stories like Arifureta's, the novel was ok at best but the extra stories are comedy gold

 

I think generally the way this will work out is...

If you can only produce a set amount of content in a certain amount of time, let us say, 30 pages a week, the majority of your readers are going to want it spent on the main story.

there will be some people who really, really, really, like character ABC, and want some extra content with that character. But only that small group is going to be happy with a side story then.

As Zerak says, those side stories are good, especially the recent ones, but most people would still just prefer more main story content.

Now, if you could produce the side stories in addition too the main story content, it might be okay. But if you're already doing 30 pages a week, and add on an extra 10 of side story, why not just go 40 main story?

 

I think side stories can be good if done right. Personally, I really like side stories in Kumo Desu ga, Nani ka?

 

what the hell is potentiol?is this a new brand of chemical?

 

Well, my english is bad. But i want to give my opinion. Side story is necessary if main story cant explore side character personality and emotion around them with main character. Side story can give "calm" feeling like daily life activity or "fun" feeling like festival and jokes.
Yeah, main story full of problem and problem solving, need side story to calm nerves.

 

this post is cancer in my eye
will you make cleaner sentences?

no one's going to read past your first sentence, without any punctuation...

 

Some stories like every people want to be a part of it and make be a free character in it.
my goal is to give something like that so that's the reason i am making this side story and will upload main story after month.

 

I dont get what you want from us??

Theres no sidestory posted on this thread.
So how will we criticize that if theres no content?

P.S
I like the extra stories of Arifureta mainly Abysslord Arc and Myuu Arcs. And also Death March sidestories.

 

my heart is broken i don't know where put them and where to not?

 

Now it does

 

and about punctuation i think i will get better after time am i right guys cause i a bit nervous too.

 

It is rather difficult to read something that you do not have access to view what it is that you wish to read,

 

i have updated the link in my post. now u can check it.