Discussion Need some opinion about this 'On development' story: The Fall

Ah, thank you.

 

But using a different fon won't be a trouble right?

 

*shrugs* It's your choice if you want to use different fonts for your story. Just remember that the simpler the font, the easier it is to read the text. Therefore, comic fonts are about the only 'fancy' font people normally use while Arial or Times New Roman are required for documents. The reason is, the simpler the font is, the more likely people will read your text. Your brain has a limit, the fancier the font, the more it taxes your brain. People don't like getting a headache from reading.

By making your font look different, you're not making your story unique or stands out. What you're doing is similar to smacking people with a bicycle. You think it's funny, but in reality nobody likes being smacked with a bicycle. Make your story stand out using your plot or prose, not by playing the font. If you get published one day, they won't care what font you used before. They'd use Times New Roman, Calibri, or Helvetica anyway.

 

Haven't write the dialogue though.

Chapter 3 (revised):

Spoiler: Chapter 3:

Three years ago, Miranda works as a mediator, curator and owner of her trading post, where adventurers would trade their cheapest items for the people in need, Miranda has a vast knowledge and high insight that were supported by a special eyeglass that gives her insight that allows her to know the value of an item.

One day, the Earl Hughes of Elior wish to make a deal with her, she took Therion because Alyne (the young now young woman) has to watch over the shop and was the only one who already knew how to use her eyeglass and have become a novice curator, while Zach (the little boy) was still too young back then like two-three years apart from his sister while just two years apart from Therion. But as soon as she got to the designated location, she frowns as the place was a tavern.

Moreover, the one whom she met wasn't the earl, but rather his snobbish son, Donnar. Donnar was drunk and revealed that their meeting was for Miranda to hand over the trading post to the Hughes, which she refuse to, Donnar couldn't go back with nothing and tries to flirt with Miranda and were about to touch her, until Therion splashes some cold water to Donnar's face.

Therion was trying to save Donnar from making the biggest mistake from trying to touch her and make him sober, however this instead angered him, think that he was shamed by a little brat. Miranda runs off carrying Therion and been grew wary ever since. The next day, Miranda always got paranoia to sent any of her children outside, then one day, she got an order to deliver an item to town, but she was too tired from all the work and fell asleep, Therion decide to delivers the item, unaware that the Donnar was stalking his mother to get a chance for revenge.

The next day, after she woke up, she faints on Alyne's lap when she heard that Therion was brought to hospital emergency service, where she was told that Therion was found beaten half to death, tied and was blindfolded, the most gruesome was that the blindfold was lighten a blaze which seared his face and probably endangered his eyes...

Lucifer vividly remembers the details to what happened from Therion's memory. Therion were on his way back when he was kidnapped, everything was dark and he was beaten, the pain and the fear was overwhelming. Therion was already at its critical and was terrified when his face was set ablaze. Therion died in his sleep but his heart was still beating, leaving the body as nothing but an empty shell.

Miranda continue to wept and blamed herself continuously, Lucifer couldn't bear the sight and decide to put an end to the drama. He clapped her cheeks, which startled Alyne and Zach. He told Miranda that it wasn't fair for her to blame herself alone, he was also the one at fault for neglecting her warning, Miranda refuse to admits it, but Lucifer just assured her that it's 50-50 their fault which made her smile.

As the visiting hours were over, Miranda, Alyne and Zach return home. Lucifer throw the 'Fall of Morningstar' to trash bin. He have another purpose now, because of Miranda. Lucifer couldn't help but to wonder about what happened to the 'true' demon king as he took glance over the trails of starry night sky he resented from the window.

Meanwhile, somewhere in the north.

Inside a cave where the rotting smells of carcasses could overwhelm many, The gigantic wolf Fenris was put to his knees as his legs were wounded by the garden of thorns that grew all over his lair, he was exhausted and poisoned from evading and receiving cuts, he was almost out of breath. It was then when in a blink of an eye, a hand appears before his face and the robed figure lay its hand upon Fenris's forehead and through a single touch a hole was made and Fenris fell lifelessly to the ground.

The size of Fenris was about the same size of a house, however, darkness spreads and swarm of countless butterflies seemingly beautiful but frightening as they swarmed over Fenris's corpse, eating his flesh that the bones were all that remains. The hooded figure walk to the exits, where the moon shone silver amidst the blizzard outside.

-Epilogue-

As the family were having their time in the room, the director of the hospital chairman Aberdine who had been listening to Miranda's story, wept her tears with her napkin. She then head straight to the morgue, "Igor, Find me any John doe of 15-16 with probably searing wound over his face."

"What do you wish to do madame?"

"Oh well, our newly awaken sleeping prince might in need of assistance against that brat."
By 'that brat' means Earl Hughes's son, he couldn't agree more. But still, this was the first time she ever cared for a patients.

"And make sure it was ready for burial, I'll call the Earl that the boy died in his sleep and he could rest assured."

"...!" Igor was shocked "M-Madame, do you wish to deceive the Earl?!"

"Of course not, this wasn't a perfect plan." she said "Think of this as his farewell gift for him to live in a shred of peace he will enjoy before facing a bitter reality."

Igor was silenced, he return to continue his work and carry out the duty given to him by the chairman.

 

Chapter 4 (revised):

Spoiler: Chapter 4:

Lucifer was frustrated as felt troubled, few days after Miranda's visit, the Igor examined him and said that he was healthy, however just to be sure, the Chairman wish to conduct another examinations to see determined to how long will he be in their care.

Lucifer wanted to out right away. However, if he did, then he'll be all over the news. Especially the tomorrow's headlines for newspapers will be 'A patient that had been in a coma for three years was released in just a day?' that'll be too suspicious. He knows that he'll have to pretend, but how will he deceive Therion's family. It was when he was in thought, Zach (the twelve year old little brother) came for a visit, he gave Therion(Lucifer) a medical book about pre-comatose condition, Lucifer feels thrilled to see a book (other than well wrapped shit from Solarya), back when he was an angel, most of his life were pretty much abuse, harassment and loss, and suffering. No one had ever show him a slight of love and kindness, even if there was, they're only out of pity and not sincerity.

books were all that he have in heaven and also the only thing that made him feels at loss. Zach soon chuckled in joy on seemingly thrilled Therion, he said 'Therion' that he knows of was a book maniac, he always tried to fed Zach and Alyne books to read, it wasn't bad and rather helpful. Lucifer was the same, but that's when something was amiss.

Zach told him that he had a 'special' passive skill that makes him a good judge of character. And he said that he knew that Therion had long been dead and was nothing but an empty shell until Lucifer wakes up. He was grateful that Lucifer set Therion free along with their mother who have condemning herself eversince he went coma. He also add that as long as Therion remains a book maniac, up to certain period, not even their mother would realize that something was out of the ordinary.

With that Zach soon left, and somehow Lucifer saw a shadow of a certain person from Zach.

Meanwhile...

At the hughes earldom, Earl Hughes was in his office, looking onto reports and documents when a woman came in. The woman was none other than chairman Aberdeen. She came to deliver the original physical examination on the first day Therion arrives along with the evidences of Donnar's doing.

The Earl pour some wine for her to drink as much as they both finds that it was distasteful for celebrating such twisted success. Aberdeen refuse and warned the Earl to put a leash on his ox brain leveled son. The Earl was sigh as he understood and wants to so as well, chairman Aberdeen urgely explains that her hospital was not an assassination ground. She warned the Earl that if there's any nobles were to sent a dying child to any hospital. A file full of the nobles spotted and dirty laundries will be on all over the kingdom and lastly on the Duke's table.

The Earl was anxious for a moment, to see chairman Aberdeen's glare, she warned Earl Hughes to forbid any interaction of his son with the trading post, and let them be. The post is better off from their hands, and if Donnar were to caused another ruckus and dead bodies on any hospitals. 'Off with your head.' she say as she left through the door.

Leaving the Earl frustrated and troubled since he barely have any power left even to raise a finger to restrain his son...

 

Chapter 5 (revised):

Spoiler: Chapter 5:

Throughout the following days, Lucifer succeeded on reaching average scores of every tests, mild happiness were shown all over his family, chairman Aberdeen however, was different. Before the last test, She asked Miranda regarding the time when Therion was first applied in their care, the record shows that he have no sign of have yet to be awakened. Miranda revealed that Therion was actually a month away from his twelfth birthday when he was hospitalized.

The chairman was quite in shock to heard it, as most awakened people would have their awakening at the age of 12, she advised Miranda to perform Therion's awakening rites here and now, and reasurred her concern of fees that the whole preparations will be taken care of by the hospital. Miranda was relieved to hear that, and went to get Therion in his room, they soon head to the hospital backyard that have been emptied under chairman's orders.

Lucifer(Therion) was confused along with his step siblings to why they were on the yard, their mother soon explain of Therion halted awakening, both Zach and Alyne belatedly remembered and was troubled as they heard it, Lucifer have no idea of what are they talking about, and Chairman explains that every individuals were born with 'Pandora System' the system allows everyone to become stronger. And commonly people were awakened when they were 12th years old through the 'Awakening' rites where their system will be awakened to their truest capabilities, the rites have, no. It must be carried by both a Scholar(Magician) and a Priest(Linker to Heaven).

Aberdeen will fill the role of the scholar and she have luckily were able to ask the help of a priest that were coming for charity visits. Lucifer was filled with doubt since he's now in his 15th, and was it even possible, Aberdeen says that its possible, and Therion was rather fortunate since there weren't many people that haven't been awakened on 12th year old, some only dares 14th year old. However, since Therion was in coma, there's a chance that his awakening might degraded due to his stagnant growth.

Miranda was having a cold feet, and wanted to stop him, but Lucifer just straightly asking to be awakened. Eventually, as the day became twilight. Aberdeen have just finished drawing magic circle and the priest have finished chanting the prayers the rites needed. A three circle, connected to one and another. Aberdeen and the priest together began their chant to awakened Therion's 'Pandora System'. The process went smoothly at first, it was when their hopes were high.

The priest and Aberdeen felt something's wrong with the ritual, Therion was about to be awakened, but the usual blue light was soon turn into dark crimson flames that suddenly engulfs Lucifer(Therion) up to the sky, everyone was in panic, Miranda asked Aberdeen about what happened, but she didn't reply, the priest as well, their eyes were blank as they were unconscious.

...

Inside the flaming spiral, Lucifer were wary of what happened to the ritual, a voice soon greets him and he shuddered as he knows the voice that were gentle as a mother to a child, it was the voice from the void. She introduced herself as 'Elpis' one of core beings to what the world known as 'Pandora System'. Elpis was here to bestow Lucifer with a gift, Lucifer was cautious, nothing came ever without a price.

She asked for nothing in return, however Lucifer finds it hard to believe, he eventually refuse the gift. It was hard to believe, Elpis was silent for a moment. She bears no ill-feeling towards Lucifer for what his decision, instead she was rather grateful, she silently left without without a word, Lucifer suddenly felt a searing heat coming from his chest and his back before he fell to his knee.

Meanwhile...

Outside the flame, Miranda and the siblings continued their effort to pull both the priest and chairman from their trance; Miranda was slapping the priest's face continuously while the chairman was being showered in cold water by the siblings, it was a horrific sight for the staffs. When Elpis left, and her control over both the priest and the chairman were diminished.

It was the most unfortunate for the two. As Miranda's accumulated slaps have toll the priest's consciousness before he was put to sleep with the last slap, while the chairman would have to rest from her work due to accumulated cold have given her a flu.

 

Chapter 6 (revised):

Spoiler: Chapter 6:

The next day, Lucifer woke up and found surrounded by pretty much everyone who was in the awakening rite, with slight awkwardness between them. Miranda soon went straight to hugs him, on which she exert too much of her strength that Lucifer feels like he was crushed, the two siblings restrained their mother and curiously asking about his results, but before that Lucifer(Therion) asked what happened back then, which they retold:

The rest of the hospital was quite in turmoil by the view that was unfolded before them(most were about how the chairman was treated), it was when the spiral of flame disappeared, it instead forms a shape of wings, black and fierce upon kneeling Therion, everyone was in awe before the sight, it was then when the flame was sucked into Therion, he suddenly fell lifelessly to the ground which drove Miranda into hysteria and the rests of the staffs to panic.

Lucifer and the priest were surprised to hear it, though Lucifer wonder was there anyone who got hurt, his mother told him that there's barely any until Igor barges in and gives Therion news of the chairman's break due to flu and the numbers of people who were injured during their effort to restrain Miranda in her 'hysteria' state, which Igor noted even more ferocious than having a magic parasitic beast found in a carcass of a horse. Miranda became uncomfortable in the room, especially towards the priest whose face was full of marks, and left the room before things became more awkward.

The siblings asked how's the outcome to which Lucifer wanted to know as well, however... he have no idea how to do so, the priest full the marks of Miranda's palm mildly explains that all he had to do was to say 'Status Window' and all be revealed, he did that and for a moment became white, everyone along with both Igor and the priest was wondering about the result, Therion soon revealed that "It's nothing... but a mere magician."

Hearing that everyone was downed or at least in disbelief, though this was only last for a while as Miranda exclaimed that she came back from the hospital's kitchen to bake Moonlight daisy pies for everyone in the room, in just matters of seconds everyone emptied the room, except for Therion and Zach who asked his mother to give him a slice to share with Therion, Miranda grin joyously thinking that this was the best chance for the two to get closer.

After she left, Zach wasn't holding back and call Therion a liar, which he chuckles about, Zach knows that it wasn't just a mere mage that Therion got, Lucifer didn't deny it, but he refused to disclose further details, which was fine for Zach. The world is a dangerous place, even family couldn't be left out of this. Though he eventually threatens to open a slight detail for a bit of comfort, to which Lucifer complies, Lucifer revealed the description of his class. "One who walks in his own path, carved with his own hands and blood, even if the whole world was to against him, he would not cower in fear, he'll fiercely defy it, as his will burn sear and bright."

"..."

Zach became silent for a moment close to a statue, Lucifer pinches his cheek to which he retaliates by delivering a chop onto his throat, choking him. It was when the door was opened revealing Miranda who was carrying two plates of Moonlight daisy pies for them, Zach was desperate to explained things, only to tragically watched as Miranda drop both plates to the floor.

She left in anger that they were fighting while she left. Zach mourns the wasted pies, while Lucifer who never tasted it just enjoyed the sight of Zach's suffering. A few days closer for Lucifer(Therion) to be released.

-Epilogue-

The priest chose to return to the cathedral after his charity visits became a one-night madness and pain. The city was cold yet bright with lights, he felt slight guilt for the kindness (despite the pain) that Miranda and her children showed him, but he shrugged off this thought to what awaits him if he were to deliver the news about Therion to the Vatican, he imagined all the glory, gold, and power he could earn just by telling them of a child in a small city that bears a mark.

He turns to an alley and when he was in thought, a beggar accidentally bumped into him. The priest turned to say sorry, only to be greeted with a knife that slit his throat, unable to even let out a sound, the beggar soon finished him off with dozen stabs on the chest, and as the priest's blood was spilled on the streets. The beggar soon follows, slitting his artery while faintly hailing to someone.

Meanwhile, in the chairman's house, Aberdeen who was in bed as she continues to sneeze was visited by a man in a purplish robe embroidered and marked with runes. The man told her that Erielle's 'dog' has been silenced, and asked what to do with the woman and her family, Aberdeen told the man to left them off, as she doesn't want Therion to hate her just now, the man decides to take his leave, but before that, he hailed Aberdeen as their Lord Leviathan's high priestess. Leviathan cult, a doomsday fanatics who worships and commits hundreds to thousands mass murder, all in the name of Leviathan the god of destruction that'll grant them salvation in death, now their eyes were set on Therion.

Aberdeen was laughing wickedly before she sneezes and was choked by the effect, the purplish robed man who were to leave, hastily head to the kitchen and boils some water to ease the high priestess suffering. It'll be more hilarious if she were to swallow something...

Spoiler: Lucifer's status window

[Status window]
Name: Therion Cifer(Lucifer)
Class: Hellraiser
Level: 35

Strength : 90, Stamina: 75, Intelligence: 136710263(+200)
Agility: 100, Insight: 13682912(+190), Defiance: 1268
Infernal power: 110(+10)

Tittles:
(The going to be Antagonist), (8th sin of defiance), (Owner of wise sage's eyes), (One who retains knowledge of the forgotten past).

[Hell raiser]
One who has gone through the wasted plains of Hell, and seeks to raise it. He walks in his own path, carved with his own hands and blood, even if the whole world was to against him, he would not cower in fear, he'll fiercely defy it, as his will burn sear and bright, let that be upon the earthly plains, the scorching waste of the Hell, or even the divine ground of Heaven.
*Infernal power+ 100
*Infernal related skills has been created
*Infernal language passive skill has been learned

[The going to be true Antagonist]
A person that will be remembered as the vilest and villainous person by the whole world.
*Immunity again divine power
*Abnormal status won't affect you at all, if it did there's a chance to increase natural resistance.
*Less bound to the absolutism of dignity stats

[8ths sin of defiance]
Lucifer the lawless, otherwise known as the defiant one, for his sin of disobeying the gods, reduced as a demon he was and become a monarch of hell; the world shall soon be frightened by the so called devil.
*locked
*Will of defiance skill has been created
*Defiance stats has been created
*Wings of defiance active skill: Locked until level 66
*Terror passive skill has been created

[Owner of wise sage's eyes]
You were born with such keen eyes, ones that were powerful enough that you're able to easily saw through the hidden.
*Can unveil hidden things
*Could penetrate the essence of things
*Has a chance to dismantle magic on sight and weakened target's concentration by 30% and lowered all stats of the target by 50% upon usage.

[One who retains the knowledge of the forgotten past]
Not only that you have been reincarnated with the whole memory intact, you as well remembered the true knowledge that has been degraded by lies and was distorted as ages pass.
*All stats related to magic will be retained with your originals
*Insight stats has been created
*There's a slight chance for you to instill on a mythical existence, though the more knowledgeable the mythical existence is, the more doubtful it will work and there's a slight chance for you to be intimidated instead.

 

Chapter 7:

Spoiler: Chapter 7:

Early in the morning Miranda and her children come to visit Therion, Lucifer was fine, but wonder why they're all wearing mourning white? Miranda revealed that the priest that helped him in his awakening was killed last night, the city guards and the city knights determine that it was Leviathan cult's doing.

Leviathan cult, 'Waste all that is meaningful, for all is meaningless in the end.' that was a fitting word for Leviathan cult, a cult organization that seek the hopeless and despair or the abandoned, believing such madness of salvation in death, their religion movements was more to an act of terror, starting from; massacre, sacrificial rites and suicidal assassinations through various form, all to grant 'poor souls' salvation from their god, Leviathan the harbinger of doom.

Lucifer was no fan of god, but he never heard of Leviathan, for if there was someone worthy of being the destroyer, that'll be the 5th great demon. Then again, the myth changes, maybe he was now known as Leviathan, the possibility of him got replaced was hard to believed.

Miranda and the sibling came because Igor had something to say to them, and speak of the devil.
Igor appear out of nowhere surprising them all, he said it was habit, and Miranda soon glare as she threatens to broomed him off to the floor. Igor was soon became frightful but thankfully Zach direct them back to the topic.

Igor soon take a mail from his coat pocket, and opens it. It was from chairman Aberdeen:

"I'm sorry for not being able to be there in person, apparently the cold was more severe than I thought."

The siblings look down to the floor slightly felt guilty, it seems that they pour to much ice on the water, Igor soon continues "I heard of what happened to priest Nara, he often came to deliver our patient on deathbed slight of comfort that the goddess are with them. To that reason, Igor will have to bought and placed a lily in his burial, my favorite flower. I hope that the Lyons were willing to do the same as well."

It was a tradition to memorate someone's passing with flowers, and Igor finally reached the final part. "Nevertheless, let's not to far astray from the topic. From the examinations and time Therion Cifer had spent with us, the examination shows us that... he's ready to go home."

Miranda and the rest was very happy to hear it, Igor was the happiest, since he won't have to deal with Miranda and the Lyons ever again, he was about to left to get Therion some new clothes, however... to their surprise, somehow, Miranda had already been prepared with a new set of clothing, Igor wanted to leave as he wonder about transportation for them, to which were answered from the outside as a farmer in his carriage were calling Miranda, asking when would they depart, Lucifer and Igor was quite astonished by the series of event that were unfold and questioned her, she only replies "A mother intuition."

For a second, Wise Sage's Eyes were activated by accident and Miranda's stats were revealed, Lucifer was baffled to see that one of Miranda's tittle was 'Penelope's candidate'. Zach noticed Therion's gaze and questioned him, 'why he looks at their mother in such way?', Lucifer really wanted to hit Zach, however he soon changed the subject into "Can I remove this now?" the bandages that were over his eye rounds. Igor was fine, although Miranda and the two siblings that just got in were worried.

But Lucifer make a joke that he might look even more handsome than he was, Alyne were volunteering, however Miranda decide to be the one's to removed it. Lucifer think and found that it's fair for her, much to her displease. Throughout the process of removing the bandages, she whispered "You know, this was like adorning someone in bridal veil. I never imagined you to be the first."

"...You're hoping for her to get married?"

"What? No, that's not what I meant..."

"Then what is it? And what's that?"

Therion ask as he look upon an eerily silver made ring that rest by Miranda's index finger, it was beautiful with the engraving he somewhat knows, however "W-What are you looking at?" Miranda followed Therion's gaze and saw nothing.

"Your ring."

"My ring?"

Miranda never wore a ring, Therion seems to be daydreaming or was too immersed by Miranda's word of imagining a wedding, her eyes didn't lie. Lucifer's eyes as well, did not lie.

[Wise Sage's eyes has revealed something hidden!]

[This however, only you can see as an unknown force were behind its concealment.]

The ring exists, it's just Miranda and perhaps others doesn't know of this as they couldn't see it, all was by an unknown force. Therion frowns for a while, and Miranda notices this, and were about to ask. However she continue to remove the bandages till it reveals Therion's face.

Igor and the siblings look at him and saw a beauty before them, fair complexion, a silver clear eyes, with short black hair, even the scars did not degraded him, it made him much attractive. This however was from Alyne's point of view, the rest were just happy, glad and "Nice!" Therion said as he looks upon the mirror, everyone was laughing with the exception of Alyne who was too immersed in her imagination of a perfect prince charming for her sketch.

As morning became noon, Miranda, the siblings, Igor and the well dressed Therion come out from the hospital. Miranda asked the farmer will he be willing to spare sometime to gives a farewell flower to recently murdered priest? The farmer eventually become polite as he was glad that they're all heading to the cathedral as well. He asked of who's the hunchback and young man that coming with them. Miranda was about to say her son, "He's an acquaintance of mine." it was Igor, as much as he was now off from Hospital's care, chairman ordered him to find a John Doe to replace Therion, to protect him.

Miranda was about to argue, until Zach whisper something to Miranda and she ends up follow the play. The farmer had no issue in the end and depart to the church by the city. Along their way, in the city streets. Lucifer were wondering why were there so many homeless and most of them were bone looking thin, "Withering spring," she said "Long time ago, it was said that a thief stole Fiora's treasure and in her resentment of the thief, who was mortal and were full of greed. She cast a curse so that mortals would have to fight and struggle to survive all to sate their greed, when spring comes after long cold winter, nothing grows. When summer replaces it, crops soon grow and war for food began."

"..."

Lucifer was astounded. Fiora, the lady of seasons can be the most gentlest of gods and could be the coldest of all, however she never gone all drastic to the whole world, to let human live strife and pain with only a season to earned food, it was all just too much. Lucifer who was in thought, soon was knocked aback by a colliding force. Everyone helped him to stand, as they got off from the carriage. Lucifer was at first in disbelief, he soon gritted his teeth as he come to learn of the goddess's identity.

Erielle, the blind goddess, wisest of gods, and the one who protect those in needs. Those were how humanity knows of her. But for other races, and Lucifer in particular. She was nothing of sorts, Lucifer bear all of it, as he come inside following the rest...

Spoiler: Miranda's stat windows

Miranda's stats window:
[Name: Miranda Lyons
Level: 98
Class: Housewife(degraded), Trader
Stats:
Strength: 165(+75), Stamina: 124(+75), Intelligence: 200(+70)
Insight: 265(+130), Agility: 96(+50), Dexterity: 133(+70)
Charm: 345(+50), Faith: 1000(+265)

Tittles: (One steps closer to become a legend S), (Penelope's candidate SS+), (Keen eyed merchant A+), (True love's faith A+), (Adamant faith B+), (Hysteria SSS+), (Mother's Self-Defense martial arts A-), (???), (???).

[Housewife]
Married woman with obligation to stand her ground in her marriage, not just for love, but for her children as well.
*Faith stats has been created
*All stats increased by 5%
*Housewife punishment has been created
*Special skill 'Fatality has been created.

[Trader]
Gold means nothing just like items worth nothing if no ones know it's true value.
*Insight stats has been created
*Insight +25
*''Negotiate' conditional passive skill has been created

[Keen eyed Trader]
Your insight were deep enough from judging the true value of items you traded!
*Insight +50
*There's a chance to highly appraise an items true value.
*'Nuh uh, don't you lie to me.' conditional passive skill has been created.

[True love's faith]
Love knows no bound, this will either be a poison to self destruction or an aid in times of lost.
*Faith stats increased +500
*'Wife's constitution' passive has been created.
*This will hold on as long as you not remarried.

[Adamant Faith]
Your faith has reached 1000, it's something that deserved to be rewarded.
*Defense increased proportioned by 5 for each 10 faith points.
*'Faith shall be thy shield' passive skill has been generated.

[One steps closer to become a legend]
A single step closer to reach a legend, one that will soon be known and revered by the world.
*All stats increased by +50
*80% immunity against abnormal condition
*In case of emergency, will enter immortal state which nullify all attacks and damages for 5 second long.

[Hysteria]
AAAAHHHH!!!
*During the state of hysteria all stats will rise by 100%
*You'll be out of control for few minutes
*You'll not recognize friends and friendly hit is bound to happen

 

Quick Question: I want to create this concept of character but wanted it to be make sense.
So, she's the demon queen, the ruler of Inferno (what 'Hell' is) before her myth got eclipsed by Lucifer.

When I created her, I was thinking what I'm afraid of, such as; cockroaches, big spiders, zombies, dirt and withering and decaying things.

In the end I came up to make her even scarier by combining Agnus 'Deceased creation' and 'Necromancy', Mirajane's Take over and lastly was Coke's corpse eater passive. The result was that I came up with a concept of abomination.

 

Chapter 8:

Spoiler: Chapter 8:

Somewhere in the plains over Vanin kingdom, the verdant green grass would brought peace for many eyes who saw it, with lilies and daisies that grew all over, many would wanted to lie there, and enjoy its peaceful nature, now on this plains stood two side.

"Kill them all!"

"Let's show these mongrels with whom they've been messing with!"

Those who saw no value in its grandeur of peace and let out their battle cries to be heard throughout the plains, they were Bill the kid's bandits and Vanin kingdom army, recently the attacks by Bill the kid bandits had been quite a nuisance to merchants and travelers, the kingdom had enough and decides to faced him, the sound of clashing swords and battle cries was sounded like a symphony of discord that somehow was a music worth to hear, to those who enjoys meaningless violence that is. Among them were these two.

"Tche! Were this all you have old man?"

"You damned mongrel! I shall have your head!"

Bill the kid was now dueling against the kingdom's general, Yvin in a sword fighting. Bill had been attacked and parrying Yvin's attack, but as time goes on, Bill finds that it was difficult to comprehend Yvin's swordsmanship that were brazen yet precise and stern to block any incoming attack from him, Bill was parrying Yvin's attack and open a gap, Yvin soon deliver a kick and knocked him to the ground.

"Your defeat." Yvin said as he pointed his sword on Bill's throat. Yvin was about to cut Bill's head, it was when out of nowhere.

"*clap, clap, clap* Bravo! Bravo indeed, what a spectacular sight it was!"

"..!"

"..!"

Bill use the chance to stand up, knocking Yvin down as he regained his sword. Both placed their sword at each others neck only to belatedly notice something. The battlefield was too silent, everything became clear as white mist cleared from their view.

"W-Where's everyone?" it was Yvin, the battlefield could no longer be called that, as there's barely any spilled blood, broken swords or let alone dead bodies.

It was as if there never was a battle there, a voice cut through their confusion "Seriously was I that insignificant that none would notice me."

The two turns around and saw a black haired man, dressed formally with a black jacket that serves as a mantle, his expression was plain despite his tone that were demanding, they soon pointed their sword onto him "Who are you, and what have you done to everyone?"

"..?"

Bill was astounded by Yvin's reaction, the man was someone who's stronger than him yet cower before such person, the man gives a slight smile as he shrug "Was there any point in telling you? Moreover there's no one else here but the three of us since the beginning." he plainly said.

"Don't you dare to lie to me!"

Yvin begin to lose his patience, Bill was no longer important to him, it was when the man reply their horror begun "Ah, looking at your armor, I supposed that you're part of Vanin kingdom's army that were coming here right?" he continue "Weren't you and your men died from a rock slide on your way here?"

"W-What?!" It was a mere word, however just as the man said. Yvin soon disappeared out of thin air, startling Bill who were watching two in confusion now became frightful, his sword fell from his hand as the man soon laid his gaze towards Bill, who was frightened by things that happen before him and were crawling back as he was trying to stand, however...

"Well, where do you think you're going?"

"Hiik!" The man soon appeared before him, was it teleportation? It was impossible to comprehend the man's power, he gave a sincere smile to the frightened Bill. "Bill the kid, you really are a kid, not only that you went to a tavern once you poisoned your people, you even cry out like a child as you were to be executed by a guillotine?" Bill could only whimper as he too disappeared into a thin air.

Somewhere near the roads, the piled bodies of the army that were buried from rockslide were successfully excavated, Yvin was unfortunate that the rocks were falling on his army. Meanwhile somewhere else, a small city were holding a celebration for Bill the kid's execution, the man was a nightmare for the people, his moments before death was satisfying as he gone mad after poisoning his whole crew and were executed.

The man uttered to himself, "Was it a lie, when what you lied about had become a truth? No, it was merely a denial against reality that you refuse to accept." The man soon left, and disappeared without a trace from the plains, that been restored as it have never been touched...

 

QQ: Is it normal I just write stories and let the readers to figure out the dialogues?

 

Chapter 9:

Spoiler: Chapter 9:

The sounds of whiplash was heard throughout the empty library, a woman adorned in bronze dress, blindfolded continue to whip a poor bizare looking angel with only one wings, the woman continue to lecture the angel that all the knowledge were hers alone, she judged the angel as waste of a time and should learn his place better; a freak, an outcast and trash.

The angel's back was filled with cuts and began to bleed, his wings that been barely feathered, plucked by the wicked woman were wept in tears made out of blood, he could not let out a sound, gagged by a bar his mouth was.

The angel was none other than Lucifer, the woman was a goddess, one who preach of equality to the world and how justice is fair, but her action never reflect on any of that. There's nothing true or fair from her, only greed and malice exists.

Erielle, the goddess that were revered by humanity as their savior. Lucifer who had entered the church by the city was more and more annoyed as the place were more to a museum that were filled with Erielle's stuffs, but most of all was something he was forced to see, "What. The. Heck?"

Lucifer and his family were now in the inner hall, the hall was filled with dozens of paintings of the heaven, among those paintings were of the moment from 'Fall of Morningstar'.

'Bold he was as he glares to the rest of gods, 'If I could not reach heaven, I'll raise hell!' He declares beforr the spears pushed him to his fall, down to the farthest reach of the Inferno.'.

It was agonizing to see how he was portrayed by the painter, the absolute horrendeus absurd looking face, how he was naked, the abs and the two wings were the worst insult.

He wanted to burst out saying a curse to heaven, but he tries to swallows it, Miranda who notices this, laid her hand to Therion's forehead, checking her condition, to which she found normal and remembered of how uncomfortable Therion was whenever he goes to this kind of place.

She whispers to Therion, assuring him that they'll just place a flower, pray and left. However, as soon as they got into the central hall, the place were more crowded than expected.

After they wait in tge line of people, they were able to placed their flower, Miranda and the siblings with Asteria(dandelions), Igor with lilies following the chairman, the farmer gives his sincere pray and placed Lymebells, Therion goes the same with Asteria as well.

Asteria was a flower revered as sign of fleetingness and departure, it was a perfect choice. They pray for a while, and was about to exit the hall, "We'll, priest Nara, may you serve by the goddess side well." said an old man adorned in bishops clothing "Now our honored guest would like to gives their sincere words, let us welcome the delegation of north, duchess Artemisia Faux, along with her son and daughter, Sebastian and Aresia Faux!"

"..!"

"..!"

The rest of the people attention soon shift from priest Nara's coffin towards three people that came from the side hall. The duchess were in black-crimson dress with fur mantle, her stern gaze and beauty reflect how much dignity she has, behind her was her son, Ragnar.

He was what a knight in shining armor looks like, adorned in armor mail with the jet black hair that was a match with his fair complexion, his serene cold blue eyes was the gem that caught the hearts of women that were in the hall, following the two was a beauty man could only dreamed of.

Long silky ebony hair, in a clear blue dress, her pale skin was the same as Ragnar's, her graceful manner bewitched many, more was because of glass like butterflies that seems to pops whenever she walks, Lucifer noticed her shoes, elegant and transparent glass like shoes. He along with dozens of people were astonished by the girl's beauty, until.

[Wise Sage's eyes has been activated!]

[!!!]

[An unknown entity noticed your gaze!]

[An unknown entity noticed your gaze!]

[An unknown entity noticed your gaze!]

"..."

For a moment Lucifer were wondering how did the Sage's eyes were activated, until he noticed, the duchess, Sebastian and his sister were looking right on his direction.

 

~There was a story, long forgotten.

Once upon a time, stood an adamant fortress surrounded by thorns and roses black as ebony, deep inside was a maiden. One day, a young man saw the from its tower, the maiden with hair long dark as midnight and skin as smooth and fair as milk. He fell in love with her, yet trapped she was inside that fortress. The man tried to enter, and was greeted by abomination made as guardian by the fortress.
The guardian asked for the man to leave and never come back, for in this fortress she will die and it's better that way, however the man was relentless, he demands an entry.

The guardian was displeased by the man's foolishness and were kill him, yet the thorn around the fortresses entrance strike the guardian, he was astounded, as much as he hate it. He allowed the man to enter, the man soon climb the stairs yet on his way to 6th floor, a knight halt him by his sword, questioning why he wish to unleash evil greater than anything to the world? The man have no idea what the knight says, but he said it was for love.

Love, the knight heard many things of it. They say love conquer all, the knight allows the man to come through and lend him his sword, as much as the man was confused to why he might need it. He continue to the highest floor, heading to her tower, on his way a maiden descend from the moonlight welcomed him, she told the man that if he wish to pass through he needs to know what he's about to face. The man believes she was nothing a maiden in aid, she agrees as well. Long she had been trapped there, longing for her freedom. The maiden soon return back to the moon, blessed the man with her shroud of light.

The man began to wonder, 1st the sword and now the shroud. Why were they gives this to him, he soon climbed the stairs into the last room, there's no one to greets him. He opens up the door, and saw her, beautiful and fair with long ebony hair dark as midnight. The man approached her, and was greeted by her, she question his reason to come. The man answer that it was all for love, she couldn't help but to laugh, mocking his believe. She said the man's effort were to naught, and he will die in regrets. Soon, the maiden's identity was revealed, she was no human. She was the wicked witch, she cast a spell and darkness engulf, however the shroud given by the maiden of moon became a light in the dark, the man notices that the witch was about to get away, through the sword given by the knight he slew the witch before she comes out.

However, much to his deepest regrets. His sword might had stopped the witch, however it also slew the maiden he loves. The witch was banished, back to the farthest reaches of inferno, the maiden as she bleed spoke, she was grateful for finally freed from her captives. Long she had struggle, keeping the witch at bay with her heart, once was the purest and fairest, yet time pass she was weakened and corrupted. The gods heeded her prayer, for someone to set her free. With a final breath, her gift for her savior was a kiss, cold and lifeless as her life fleets and she dies, in his arms. The man was in tears, agonized by his blinded love. In his agony, seeking for salvation.

A voice pure and warm, yet to some reason lifeless and dark. The voice offered him a chance for a moment with the maiden, he have nothing left to live for, yet seeking something for his life have means, he accepts the voice offers. Granted power, to deny cruelty of the reality, with a single lie all was twisted to his liking. That was the moment his name will be known, and gods be trembled by his name. 700 years until his beloved were to return...

 

Were this kind of skill description okay?

 

Spoiler: Chapter 10:

Chapter 10:

When she woke up, she was no longer where she supposed to be, in a plains covered in snow, the girl saw from afar, a door. She doesn't know why, but the door, it's calling her. It was a voice familiar and gentle, and caused her to feel longing as if she wish to meet the voice once again. She eventually reach the door, but an ominous presence were oozing its way from there. The girl was scared, yet the voice assured her to open it, she was hesitant, the urge was weighing on her. She eventually opens that door, where she was faced with a frozen lake. The girl walked towards the lake's surface, yet before she were to step there.

The lake melts, and from its water, its water dyed in red. She froze there to see what she had just discover...

...

"No!"

The girl woke up in shock, she look around and she was in her carriage, on its way to the west with the convoy, her maid who slept on the other bench was startled. Her breathing was shallow, how long has it been since then?

"L-Lady Aresia?" said her maid, "are you alright? Should I make you some treats?"

Aresia, stares at her maid blankly for awhile, sweats flows as it drops from her long ebony hair, "I'm fine." she said "A black coffee would be nice, thanks for asking Astarte."

"..."

Astarte at first doubt her lady's words, however. She recalled that blank stares, long she had known her lady, and she's sure. If she were to asks another question, her blood will drench the carriage. She soon prepared the coffee, Aresia took a glance to the view outside, she saw farmhouses stood over plots of verdant grassland, the rays of sun that were to rise, and the birds that flew all over the skies. Resentment was all she had for the sight, it was when she was in thought.

-Geez, sis. said the voice, coming from her mind, we really have to talk about dream boundaries.

-..!

Aresia could only sigh, as she belatedly remember about it, having a twin with psychic link was something the least she would have to dealt with. She buried her face under her palms as she reply.

-How much have you seen?

-...You don't have to ask, I was there as well, you jerk.

-...I-I'm sorry for the inconvenience.

-Okay, that's enough. That's... not fair.

-Not fair, was it because you haven't apologize for what you made me to watch... like all of it?

-"__"

-...

There was an awkward silence between the two when she mention it, marking the ends of their telepathic conversation, it was when she was about to take another sip coffee. 'Oh thank goodness, he left. Otherwise I might not have another chance.' Another voice appear, startling her and burnt her tongue in the process, frightens Astarte as she soon tried to find an emergency ice (this was not the first).

The voice was amused to see her suffer, calling her a child who have yet to grow up. Aresia easily retorted this, 'Then wouldn't this quite ironic?' she thought 'you who was once the most feared of all, reduced to a parasite, clings over a little girl who have yet to grow up?' the voice was soon felt humiliated and returns to wherever came from.

Astarte offered her ice to eased her burning tongue, they soon reached the city of Rufus and after quite a while, both took a glance over the window and notice the beggars and homeless that roams over the alleys and the streets were as thin as twigs, it was quite the opposite with the North. Which the rest of continent criticize the North and its inhabitants as 'sadists barbarians and savage mongrels that lives in the dark'. Funny to say to see how the west treats their people, starved to the bone.



Without noticing, time passes and they soon reached their destination. Before them was the so called 'Cathedral' however, the size was comparable to a city hall. The coachmen alerted the two that they have reached their destination. It was then when Astarte heard it, the air inside become eerie, as she soon warned the coachmen to leave her with the lady, much to both discomfort, until they realized what was going on.

"It's time to get you dressed up!"

"..!"

"..!"

The coachmen run, leaving Aresia at the mercy of Astarte as she pulls out clothing, threads, needles and scissor. Her cry was heard from the carriage, and was silenced, muffled by clothing as Astarte soon began to dressed her to her liking. The coachmen could only shed tears, hoping that his carriage were not damaged as it was just been polished about a week ago.

Spoiler: Clarification:

(Clarification: The Northerners live in a land where everyday was cloudy and snowy, they're not 'sadist'. Just blatantly straightforward against those who threatens them, the majority of their populations were in deed mix-breed (mongrels), consists on; demi-humans (as in half-animal), half-ling (like hobbits, or half-elf), and some times were half-demonkin (mostly vampires which was banished from Hell since the fall of their creator). They despise slave trafficker the most, and if one were to be found. They will be thrown into the wilds where beasts shall have a feast upon 'foul swine' that seeks to defile their lands)

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Spoiler: Chapter 11:

Chapter 11:

"It's finished!"

"Thank goodness."

It took Astarte awhile for her to finished the dress, she was proud of her skill that came out beautifully, she looks at her lady and saw the rebirth of 'Cendrillon' elegance and grace from Aresia, that however was her thoughts alone. While on the other hands.

'This better be a dream.'

For Aresia who had gone through an hour of fiasco clothing, she hates pretty much all of it. Her blue sky gown was something worth her hate, she hates blue and glitters that roam all over the gown was like having bling-bling on a clothing, furthermore for heaven sake what's with these bows?! Astarte had work for her for at least 8 years, and she wonder whether her own maid truly knows her? Then again, 'should they even know us?' the Faux, as much as her family were known and respected by the people, they barely had any idea of what they are. What she is and what she's capable of. She shook such thought, as she got off from the carriage, and head straight to the cathedral. No one will ever know them in the end, or so she thought...

[Wise Sage's eyes have recognized you!]

"..." 'what?' her disbelief could only be seen through her facade smile that gone awry before the crowd.

...

[Wise Sage's eyes has been activated!]

When this notification pops out, Lucifer was confused about what did he sees that it triggers the eye, it was when another notification explains it.

[Former 3rd Hell's Monarch, Satrina the Crimson duke is searching for you!]

[2nd Hell's Monarch, Valkyr the Everburning is vigilantly on the lookout against your presence!]

"..!"

'S-Satrina and Valkyr here?! In this very cathedral?!' Lucifer was quite in shock. He plans to seek them out eventually, but never come to his thought that they'll come before him this quick, just as he was about to recover from his shock, an even shocking notification appears.

[!!!]

[Former Grand Monarch of Hell, the 1st Great demon, Titania the Lady of rot recognize your presence and greets you with a wicked smile!]

'Ha? HAAAAH?!' It threw him into a greater shock. To think that such 'abomination', whom Erielle despised so much to be here, Lucifer was thrilled but then he noticed something, the gaze of the Fauxes, 'why are they looking here?' just as he was in thought.

"Excuse me," the duchess suddenly spoke, stirring the crowd with her loud and sweet voice "what in the world is that?" as she points to the hall, right at the portrait of Lucifer.

The crowd were confused, and the bishop soon explains "T-That is the enemy of Erielle, Lucifer Morningstar, that portray the moment of his fall."

"Ah, bold he was as he declare to the rest of Heaven that he'll raise hell and something like that was it not?"

"Ah, you're correct." The bishop said with polite tone, however Lucifer already seen how much he found how distasteful it was, Lucifer doesn't care much about the portray, it was inaccurate, clearly overbearing and most of all, morally disgusting to the eye. However.

"What an accurate description!"

"..?!"

That was the moment he doubted all that he heard next, the duchess continue to complimenting how accurate, beautiful looking the portray was, the bishop was in disbelief and so does the crowd. But Lucifer, 'Is that woman blind?' he wanted to snap at her, for someone who existed for 1000 years and clearly should have learn of how stupid that painting was, the duchess soon deliver the last stroke "A pity that he's not real though."

"..?!"

Lucifer's anger reached its peak, a notification appear out of the blue.

[You have fulfilled one of Hellraiser's hidden quest!]

[Through your immense rage that has reached its peak, passive exclusive skill 'Conflagration' has been acquired!]

[The burning flame around you shall heeded your wrath!]

"W-What?" Just as he wonder what does that means.

"Oh god, the flames!"

"W-Why're they dark!"

"..!"

The flame that were in the lamps and torches that were once calm and was contained soon becomes dark and grew hotter as the crowd watch in horror. The Faux and the Bishop was astounded, so does with Lucifer and others, they soon break free from their cages and soar upward against the ceilings, scorching it and began to creep downward. The screams of the crowd as they flee outside for their life, it was the moment where the meant to be a passing ceremonial and meeting with the Northern delegation, soon were remembered in history as Lucifer's first terror attack...

Spoiler: Conflagration:

[Conflagration]
[Type: Passive
Level: 1
Rating: Normal(growth)
From a fireball to dragon's breath, a tiny spark becomes a fiery wrath of Hellraiser.
*Enhanced all fire based skills and power by 50%.
*All the fire under proximity of 10 meters is yours to command, however there's need in understanding or dominance.
*Conditional skill 'Sear and ablaze' has been created. However your level is lacking, therefore this skill will be sealed until level 66.]

 

Chapter 12:

Spoiler: Chapter 12:

"F-Fire!"

It didn't take long before chaos ensue, as the fire began to crept its way downward, the crowd that fills the hall soon flooded the exits to the hall, fleeing for their lives. The Faux, were soon ignored along with the bishop that could kneel as he begs for mercy and salvation to their goddess. Lucifer was continuously pushed by the surging current of the crowds that wanting to flee for their lives. It was as he was about to be dragged.

"Hold my hands!"

Lucifer took that hands, it was Zach, he hold their mother as she hold their sister. They soon make their way to the exits, but as soon as they got there.

'Oh shit.'

The fire had already devoured the other side of the hall, panicking the people even more. The four were trying to hold on, particularly was Zach as he was bumped over and over, the crowds soon overwhelm them, and much to their horror.

"Mother!"

"Alyne!"

"..!"

Alyne's hand was unable to hold on against the surging crowds, they were trying to reached her, however she was soon swallowed by the crowds. They nevertheless continue to try, however it was for naught. The fire begun to spread, Miranda couldn't help but to be agonized and torn as she tried to dragged the rest of her children out. Zach was resisting, but his mother soon lift the 12th year old over her back, he cried and tried to made their mother to come to her senses. Lucifer saw this, and blamed himself.

'I... never meant to,' he utter in his thought, 'I never meant for it come to this.'

He soon made a decision, much to Miranda's horror. She felt her hold over his hands leaving her, she took a turn and saw Therion expression. It was determination, 'I'll bring her back, just you wait.' Miranda was heartbroken, she have lose him once, and she might lose her daughter. Zach will lose his siblings. She continue to brought Zach outside, leaving them behind. She hated, no, disgusted of herself.

....

"Alyne!"

Amidst teh crowd that he's going against, Lucifer began to call for her name, hoping that she could give him her location. Lucifer continue to head against them, being bumped over and over, there in a side of the corridor hall. He saw her lying, unconscious. Lucifer tried to make his way to her, however teh crowds began to overwhelms him, the smoke as well. He soon fell and were trampled and kneed by the people, and fell unconscious as he tried to reach Alyne.

....

"Why..."

"..!"

Lucifer woke up, he's no longer in the burning corridor. Yet he felt strange to the sight that were unfold before him.

"What in the world?"

It was a cemetery, there a woman was hugging as she cries over two tombstone, while a child just lifelessly stood there.

Lucifer take a closer looks, and was horrified. The child was Zach, and the woman was none other than Miranda, but he was more horrified to see the tombstone.

Here lies, Auralyne Steorra Lyons. Beloved daughter and sister. May her light shone over where she rests in peace.

Here lies, Therion Cifer. Beloved son, a brother and most missed by all. Wherever he rest, may he's free.

'Have I... died?'

Lucifer hoped that it was wrong, but someone scoffs at him.

"Not yet, but soon you will be."

"..!"

It came from behind, and as he turns the darkness soon devoured the view along with Lucifer.

"Who are you!"

"Who am I?"

For that time, the darkness felt familiar. The loneliness, despair, and restlessness. It startle him, and the voice laughed him. "Truly, Lucifer. Did you think that you're free?" it said "I might not be the void from whence you came from, but I could send you back. Honestly why don't you just rest there?"

"..?"

Rest? How can he rest there?! Lucifer grit his teeth as he wish to get out of whatever this place was, the voice once more speak. "I truly couldn't fathom why." it said, "look at you, in the past you're a murderer."

"..!"

"A monster that ruins countless life. Have you not forget of their frighten face, their resentment of you, how much they damned your very existence despite your innocence?"

He recalled the face of the soldiers, people, and kingdom he ruined for his freedom against tyrant. How much blood he have shed for it.

"Now look at you, you have creates an even greater sorrow." It said "That woman and her son, they'll die. Horribly, for what they have lost because of you."

"..!"

Soon the darkness that envelops, disappeared. He was soon faced with a gruesome sight, Miranda, in her kitchen were hung on the ceiling. Lucifer couldn't believe it, the scene soon shift to another. An man in cloak and hood, were now facing ugly looking creatures in the woods, his condition were not good, full of bruises and cuts. The creature lunge and the man evade, yet the hood was soon pushed back and reveals who that man was.

"Z-Zach..." it seems like him, yet the cuts and the lifelessness all over his face was filled with one thing, killing intent, yet it was so thoughtless and reckless, Zach was soon filled by wounds and with final blow, Lucifer were forced to witness how Zach was killed. The scene returns back to the darkness.

"You see now? In the end, your effort is futile. You have not even saved a life." It said "That pretty boy back from 1000 years ago, he died. In the end you failed and their fate are now sealed to an even grimmer path because of you."

"..."

Was it true? Was... all that he had done was for nothing, only making things even worse? Lucifer, in his despair could only wonder was all he had done, all that he had gone through, the loneliness and the sorrow he endured from the void, the chance given by Elpis. Were all going to end like this? He, as much as it was a mere blur.

-killing, that's what I have, yet I don't want to. I don't want to kill. If there was a chance for me to save a life, I'll gladly put my life on the risk.

-That's stupid, in the end everything were meant to die, disappear or forgotten. Why bother to save a life even putting your life for it if they were to die in the end?

"Even if they were to die, at least to help them to live, even just for another day in peace and were able to live freely. It was worth it."

"..?"

The voice, seemingly distraught were still unable to fathom why. Lucifer soon had enough "You said that their fate was sealed, then was fate absolute?"

"...You already knew the answer."

Wasn't it obvious, the voice finds what he asks as ridiculous, "Then I'll break it."

"..!"

Wanting to break fate? what sort of nonsense was he talking about? The voice couldn't comprehend it.

"I don't give a shit to god, nor fate. If this was what you call fate, I'll screw it. I'll torch it, heck I'll against it!"

"..."

The voice was speechless for a while. But in the end he couldn't help it, "Marvelous."

"..?"

"MARVELOUS INDEED!"

"..?!"

He for the first time was able to feel it, amusement, satisfaction, joy. It was things that he have long became numb of it, yet to hear Lucifer's resolve. It was quite delightful.

"That resolve of yours, such arrogance, such impudence, but most of all was how defying it was!"

"..?"

Lucifer heard him and could only saw him as a madman, the voice spoke once more.

"It'll be a pleasure to meet you once again, perhaps in another time." he said "I'll enjoy myself as I trample it to the ground."

It was a declaration, in his silence, Lucifer understood and agrees to it. However, "have you ever heard the word psyche before?"

"..?"

"Wise Sage's Eyes."

"..!"

A declaration it was, yet what of the fairness if the two declares to against each other if they know nothing of one and another? Lucifer soon disappeared as he were sent back to reality, the voice couldn't help but to muffle his laugh and burst, long have he forgot such amusement.

"We'll meet again then, farewell."

The voice soon disappeared, leaving the darkness once again.

 

Chapter 13:

Spoiler: chapter 13:

Chapter 13:

[Wise Sage’s Eyes have seen the target!]

Before he left whatever he came into, Lucifer had to know whether he was an ally or foe. The Sage’s Eyes will do best to learn it, however, much against his expectations.

[..!]

[!!!]

[The Wise Sage’s Eyes are unable to see through the target!]

“..!”

It was surprising, but another appears and shocked him with curiosity.

[Only the ‘eyes of truth’ that could see through the greatest of lie!]

‘The greatest of lie?’ that word struck him, there are plenty of liars that he could remember from his past-life knowledge. However, none of them, not even the vilest of demons in hell nor the cruel gods in heaven were the same as that man, soon light were before him.

….

“Dammit.”

As soon as Lucifer opens his eye, he his head was soon in great deal of pain. However, this did not hinder what he suffers for.

“Alyne!”

He soon goes to Alyne who was lying on the floor. Lucifer soon goes to check her pulse and breathing, and to his relieve, she was alive. Her cheek though, was slightly bruised.

‘She must’ve have been kneed.’

Lucifer hurriedly slung her arms to his shoulder and carried her as he tried to woke her up, they continue to walk down the corridor, he soon find things strange. The last time he remembers, there was a fire behind them coming from the ceiling and crept through the wall. Yet now, there wasn’t?

‘Was it me?’

He remember what he had achieve when his anger reaches it’s peak.

[Conflagration]
[Type: Passive
Level: 1
Rating: Normal(growth)
From a fireball to dragon's breath, a tiny spark becomes a fiery wrath of Hellraiser.
*Enhanced all fire based skills and power by 50%.
*All the fire under proximity of 10 meters is yours to command, however there's need in understanding or dominance.
*Conditional skill 'Sear and ablaze' has been created. However your level is lacking, therefore this skill will be sealed until level 66.]

‘All the fire under proximity of 10 meters was mine to command.’ He wonder, were his desire to saved Alyne, put the fire out? He shook the thought and continues to walk as he tried to wake Alyne up from her sleep, however as he reached the section of the corridors…

“How great…”

The burning cinders, and rubbles block his path, he turns and was forced to take another road. “Courtyard it is.”

As he carried Alyne, heading towards the courtyard, he never expect what lies awaits him there.

…

“Kill the Northerner wretches!”

In the courtyard, the bishop along with several paladins and priests were lining up to fight against the invading forces that seek to destroy their cathedral, however. The wails of paladins in horror to what they’re up against were all that could be heard.

Standing before the fallen was a maid almost as tall as the gigantes, carrying a mace that crushed those who stood against her. The priest weren’t left as well, for each time they heal or bless the paladins to fight, cornered by arrows and snares that struck their hands before it sniped them from the other two servants.

Meanwhile the elites stood in circle as they had the duchess Faux son and daughter cornered.

“Surrender now, or die!”

The elite paladins’ demands for their surrender, however, if only they knew the North just as they feared and respect the Faux.

“Sis, can't you believe what they just said?”

“Honestly brother," she said, her smile soon disappears "There's no point to reason with these bastards!”

Just as they finished, the paladins’ were trembling in fright. There’s something wrong, something terrible. Nevertheless, they stood for what they were meant to be, and charged towards, both the beauty and the knight. It was a bad call, a really, really bad one.

“Purgation.”

“Abomination takeover”

Soon their horror began, as the beauty they once admired turn her hands dark and with claws sharper than blades, while the knight raised his bow with fierce blue flame ready to fire upon them. The beauty began to slew her way through against the paladins, they were trying to fight back, but sadly.

“Aagh!”

“M-My arms!”

It was futile effort, the knight’s precision as he fired flame arrows from the bow struck and disabled their hands, leaving them under the mercy of the beauty as she slew them.

The bishop’s, were forced to watch how the cathedral servants getting slaughtered by Northerners force, as he tried to hold against the duchess Faux.

“Damn you all,” his rage reach the peak, he soon summon countless rays of light in form of blade, to bombard against them, but he should deal with her first.

“Blood curtain.”

“...!”

Blood of the fallen, soon arise and became a curtain that devoured the rays of light. The bishop was bawled by it.

“You monstrous wench,” the bishop said, not a good word for a man who serve a goddess though. “It is true then, the rumor is true that you made a deal with the damned!”

The duchess eyes soon became crimson red, and a pressure that overwhelms him were all over the air. The bishop cast a blade of light towards the duchess. But the duchess easily avoids it, much to the bishop’s horror.

“Did you really think that such trivial power would work against me?”

The duchess eyes were full of anger, she felt disparaged for someone like her were to be taken lightly with a divine power made blade.

“*laugh* maybe,” the bishop laugh, strange enough either he had a death wish or something, “why don’t you look to where it ends?”

“..?”

The duchess was confused, and takes a turn to see and was speechless. The bishop was hoping that she’ll go mad and reveal of who she really is, a monster. However, “did you know who you’d just fired at?”

“..?”

The duchess saw a young woman, lying unconscious beside a crumbled wall. She noticed the girl was someone she was familiar with, as much as they just met in the hall.

…

Awhile ago…

Lucifer who’d been carrying Alyne was amazed and horrified at the same time as he witness of how the beautiful maiden he saw before was Titania’s contractor.

‘Well, that certainly gives me quite enlightenment of beauty and the beast.’

He began to sneak through the open corridor as he heads to the exit, but something was strange. Suddenly his shadow dispersed and bright light come to him. Lucifer knows why and throws Alyne to the courtyard, just before a blinding light blasted him, strangely though.

[Divine magic has been nullified due to antagonist tittle!]

Lucifer was amused for a few seconds.

“Uhk,” before he crashed into a wall.

[You have suffered 139 damages from crashing into a wall!]

He could feel life fleeting from his back, and as if that was not enough.

‘Shit’

It was his last thought, before the wall he crashed into, crumbled and buried him under piles of rock.

[You have suffered 10 from brick]

[You have suffered…

[You have…

[…

[…

[You have suffered 138 damages from bricks in total!]

Lucifer made a mental note: 'Let's not take any path with a wall, and whoever did this is going to die.

 

QQ: Should I change the name of few characters here?
Aresia to Aria
Ragnar to Alarick
Zach to Mark
Please responds, if there's anyone.

 

Chapter 14:

Spoiler: Chapter 14:

“Did you know who’d you just fired at?”

“…?”

The bishop was confused by the duchess’s words. He believes that he fired and killed a child, a squire or a servant to the wench that stood before him. He soon began to wonder, unless…

‘Could it be?’

During the fire in the hall, people were running for their lives back then, there are some who were trampled and kneed because of the surging crowds. The bishop was soon horrified, but that only last for a moment.

“*Wicked and insane sort of laugh* Well, it seems better for whoever he was.” he weren’t even bothered to use arrogant tone “To die by my hands, one who have served the goddess with faith, and earn the trust of the angel. This isn’t something to feel bad about; he’ll be in gratitude to be sent to the goddess side by my hands!”

His pride of his servitude rang throughout the courtyard that had been piled with corpses of cathedral guardians. It was in his moment of self-triumphant.

“Sorry,” a voice said, the bishop turns and look at the rubble of the wall where the boy was supposed to die from. “You see, to hell with your goddess.”

“..!”

The bishop was in disbelief, how could he have survived? He soon laid his eyes everywhere, and found something. “Ah, so that’s how it is.”

“…?”

“That wench,” he points towards Alyne who lies unconscious, the bishop believes that it was her doing, she’s a witch. Someone who traded their soul to the damned monarch, the sons of perditions in hell! “I’ll kill her first.”

“..!”

“..!”

The duchess and Lucifer became alarmed, the bishop began his chant, “O’ Erielle, the lady of wisdom, the blind patron of humanity…” as the bishop continue to incite the chanting, lights appear from the darkness, the duchess were on smoke as he was exposed to it, and decide to take several step back from him. “In the name of Erielle, repent for your sin! Goddess Smite!”

Soon a huge mass of light descend towards Alyne, and the whole place were engulfed in white blinding light. The whole courtyard were devastated and were covered in smokes, the duchess skins were starting to combust, while a butler who used a bow were disintegrated to ashes. The duchess son’s and daughter were on their knees, from being smite. The bishop was laughing wholeheartedly seeing those who against him were pathetically kneeling before him, all but one.

“Tche, pathethic.”

“..!”

“..?!”

The bishop were soon in utter disbelief, he was sure that his smite were directed towards that witch! Yet how could that boy still able to speak in pleasant. As the smokes were cleared out, a gold light shield in a size of a wall were seen, “You!” the bishop couldn’t help but to lash his anger, “how dare you, a sinner to use the holy shield of light!”

“The Holy shield of light, you say?” Lucifer finds it ridiculous. “Ah, so that wench was still as voracious as ever I see.”

“..!”

Calling goddess Erielle a voracious wench? The bishop began to recite, his chant to call down another smite, however.

“Have a taste of this! Lux Hasta!” and soon a tiny spear of light flew towards him, the bishop finds that it’ll be futile as he summons swords of light and enchant himself with shield of light. But to his disbelief; the spear went through, destroying all the swords and soon pierced his shield once it lands on to his abdomen.

The bishop, in his utter disbelief, as he was wounded by a child, a mere child fell to his knees. Lucifer approaches him, as he wants to make the prick to pay for pretty much everything he went through because of him.

It was then when.

[Hell raiser, before you was a sinner that needs to be punished!]

[Will you examine the evidences, and judge him?]

…

Demi humans were nonetheless mongrels and savages they say. That’s what the priests said, mongrels. They are aberration of humanity, and therefore must be vanquished for the purity of human race.

They took me once, to watch how to lure and catch these ‘beasts’, try to fed them one and put them on a sack, try to show them a house and lock them for a whole night. Starved them for days, let them become what they truly are.

In the end, thin to the bone, lifeless eyes. Brought them to the woods, and tied them to a pole where woods and sticks were gathered beneath the pole, lit the fire and watch them burn, watch humanity be purified, cleansed from the stain of the world.

I carried this once, and couldn’t help but to feel that it’s the right thing to do…

…

Lucifer looks at the bishop who was before him, as he gouged blood from his mouth.

“M-Mercy,” he begs even with tears, if it was someone else, they’ll be touched and were unable to do what Lucifer was about to.

“I pity you.” He said, and it wasn’t an exaggeration. For he had once forced to live as something he wasn’t, becoming a slave that were brainwashed to terrorize the world. He truly pitied him, therefore with a single smile. “Ignis Uro.”

From Lucifer’s hand, a tiny sparks fell to the bishop’s robe, and it soon became a flame that swallows him. His scream of agony was something he hoped to die without pain, yet what of those who he had forced to suffer such death and prejudice. A notification soon appears.

[You have slain the corrupted Erielle’s church leader, Bishop Vittor!]

[Angel Shamsiel have been freed from his forced contract!]

[50.000 experiences have been gained after it was split with contribution.]

Soon Lucifer were engulfed in white light that were quite a show for many.

[You have level up!]

[You have level up!]

[You have…

[You have…

[You…

[…

[…

[You have reached level 60]

“…”

Lucifer was quite in shock, so does the Faux, however.

“Therion?”

“..!”

Alyne was awoken and her expression tells that she saw all of it.