Poem NUF's 2nd Anniversary Celebration - Poetry Competition

Discussion in 'Community Creations' started by Pyoo, Sep 4, 2017.

  1. Lovely

    Lovely 『Valentines Terror!』『Cherished Kitty』『Rika's Twin』

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    me too Q.Q
     
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  2. Nurman

    Nurman ( ಠ∩ಠ) [Retired Ton]

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    What are you talking about? I thought I made the ending so clear that even a feathered brain would understand~

    Sigh, why can’t you be more like @Lady Luck ?

    Well, all you need to take from the ending is that all of your potatoes now belong to Ton. Jokes aside, another way of wording that final bit: “falling in love or breaking apart, it should be left to the heart” or “Don’t think, just feel~” or even more simply “ @Lady Luck > @Pyoo
     
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  3. Nurman

    Nurman ( ಠ∩ಠ) [Retired Ton]

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    She actually dies a bit everyday, that’s why our magical girl of stabby mac stab stab can’t get out of hell.
     
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  4. Pyoo

    Pyoo ☀ Summer Melody ☀

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    Nope~
    >w< hurhur talk me up more!

    the voting is only for fan favourite~ the winners are decided by the judges~
     
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  5. Clozdark

    Clozdark "Kuma chan \(≧◡≦)/ "「airhead」「nonsense speaker]

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    I got third in the bottom ~
    Wahahaha \\\\(۶•̀ᴗ•́)۶////
     
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  6. Risus

    Risus ✵ Enigmatic Poet ✵ Tiger ✵ Reese's ✵

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    Lol, I completely agree with your assessments. Personally felt quite lacking in emotion a certain creativity and substance. The poem was done in a way that defines chance encounters, then provides an example like it’s some sort of school work

    @Pyoo ...it wasn’t meant to be lewd .-. Didn’t even think of it that way... wow lol. The more life thing was a random allusion I plugged in for my own amusement... i got lost in life, so I didn’t work on it as steady as I should’ve

    @BlancFrost i freakin looove metaphors

    @Action I learned most of what I know about rhyme/meter from rap, hahaha I like music and so I try to incorporate that flow, that style, into my poems.
    Ah, but the weaving fate part was a purposefully unoriginal, an allusion! My self-amusement became a detriment, doth tis be a fatal flaw? *dramatic sigh*

    This was fun~
     
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  7. Pyoo

    Pyoo ☀ Summer Melody ☀

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    :3

    *pats and gives fish* good luck with life!