Poem [PARTNERS IN RHYME] Blanc Poem Pool

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  1. BlancFrost

    BlancFrost ❄Middle child: Carm & Dev + Sio's FSIL ❄

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    Pull the trigger and you'll be dead
    Bang bang
    Out the door
    We'll never see you forever more
    ...........hmm regret is the last thing anyone wants to feel on their wedding day.
    Or you could just write a literal meaning of the theme with no usage of exaggeration or metaphors in the poems. Or you could do what Fab has done and just post a poem here :3
    Too many times have we heard those words
    Too many times it has been used
    They may think it is unheard
    But that is hardly true

    Behind those smirks and knowing gaze
    Trading laughter behind closed doors
    "She didn't get my meaning" He said
    "When I told her she didn't have enough,
    Clothes and makeup to last her a month"
     
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  2. hatoyin97

    hatoyin97 «Frigid Heart Petrification Manual»

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    Wedding against your will should and the RED TEARS blossoms due to that ..
    The flower would be green if I am not wrong...
     
  3. BlancFrost

    BlancFrost ❄Middle child: Carm & Dev + Sio's FSIL ❄

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    Green flower? Green with envy? Sickness? Blossoming fields?
     
  4. hatoyin97

    hatoyin97 «Frigid Heart Petrification Manual»

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    Is disgust....
    And there is no color representation for the seven sins
     
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  5. hatoyin97

    hatoyin97 «Frigid Heart Petrification Manual»

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    I am in search of a white flower.... ....
    It is a flower that never withers ......
    *Longing face*

    >.> I am quite sure there is no such rain to make a white flower blossoms....
    But .....
    You can guess my thoughts....
     
  6. BlancFrost

    BlancFrost ❄Middle child: Carm & Dev + Sio's FSIL ❄

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    >.>
    No. I don't want to.
     
  7. hatoyin97

    hatoyin97 «Frigid Heart Petrification Manual»

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    Dun worry... >.>
    And No thx >.>
    Why guess wrgly >.>
    what ever >.>
    This is going to the wrg direction >.>
     
  8. udonsage

    udonsage [Underpaid Software Developer] [Lazy Novelist]

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    Title: Wander
    Theme: "Distance".

    Thundering clouds asunder
    Breaking down honor

    High tide looking fonder
    By the low ride of wonder

    I start to wander
     
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    hatoyin97 «Frigid Heart Petrification Manual»

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    Is it not finished or is just this ? >_>
    Plz finish ur poem no matter is bad or good....
     
  10. Fabulist Ed

    Fabulist Ed 〖He Who Must Not Be Tamed〗〖Workaholic〗

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    ??? "Just this"? "not finished"? "Bad or good"?
    What do you mean?
     
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    hatoyin97 «Frigid Heart Petrification Manual»

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    If just this mean.. the poem barely aligned with the theme... Why dun he just make the theme weather >.>
     
  12. hatoyin97

    hatoyin97 «Frigid Heart Petrification Manual»

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    I would like to help... But is not in my feild as you can see my poems in previous pages.. >.>
     
  13. BlancFrost

    BlancFrost ❄Middle child: Carm & Dev + Sio's FSIL ❄

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    In your opinion it wasn't aligning but I guess that's just it. Different people see poems differently. By analysing someone elses poem, you can then find hidden meanings behind the words. All may not be the same but that's just poetry ^_^;
    Personally I think Udons poem is fine~ All are welcome to post and challenge themselves with the theme after all.

    Also I didn't say it before but please refrain from double posting in this thread. It's fine if you're doing poems for the themes but if it is just comments, one post would be enough (with multiple quotes in it, or you could just edit your old post.) everyone would still see your comment either way. I just don't want to clutter the thread when there are themes active.

    Of you have more questions for the person who posted the poem, you can always comment on their profile or even pm them. ^_^
     
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  14. hatoyin97

    hatoyin97 «Frigid Heart Petrification Manual»

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    Ehhhhh
    .. I Just really like to give opinion.. =3=
     
  15. Bielt

    Bielt 『Planets Eater』『The Sin of Animosity』

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    As far as I can see Undo's poem is completely into the theme.
    Remembering that the "themes" can be explored in anyway the writer want, and many times we use the theme in a figurative way.

    besides who do you think you are to go around saying "s it not finished or is just this ? >_>
    Plz finish ur poem no matter is bad or good...."

    Poem isn't about size, and it isn't up to you to judge if his poem is good or bad.

    Have respect for others, and think before going around posting things like "plz finish your poem"

    cause as far as I can see you are acting like a asshole.
     
  16. Fabulist Ed

    Fabulist Ed 〖He Who Must Not Be Tamed〗〖Workaholic〗

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    Theme: Freedom
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    Fabulist Dilemma

    To tell tales is a sort of freedom
    for worlds are made
    with infinite shades
    as quickly as you can name them

    But for all those that tasted this ecstasy
    they would know of the writer's nemeses
    for the writer's craft is not without poisons
    as I too am trapped in one such prison.

    Even in the light of day
    I feel the dark of night
    for I am in a cage
    with writer's blight

    To be locked in one mindset
    as white is white as white
    I feel not my lust for flight
    for I am trapped by gravity's might.

    I sought draughts and cure
    but none broadened my humour
    I sought out light mild tales
    but my thoughts are like hard nails.

    What my hands wish to weave
    are tales like summer breeze
    but the words expelled from these fingers
    are grim yarns of death and danger.

    Where art thou
    my temperate slice of life
    Where art thou
    those lives without strife

    With this pen there are nought I cannot make
    even worlds full of honey and cakes
    but even so my creations are full of conflict
    bound by my love for high stake dramatics…
     
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  17. Lonelycity

    Lonelycity Twice Bitten Thrice Shy

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    wow you brought out the nuances and pain of a writer real well.. but how does this connect with the theme freedom? I can't see the connect.
    PS: you used some good vocabulary there... words that aren't in common use.
     
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  18. Fabulist Ed

    Fabulist Ed 〖He Who Must Not Be Tamed〗〖Workaholic〗

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    Hmm...
    I suppose... I was playing with the opposite of freedom as well as kinda juxtapositioning(?) it I guess
    or kinda paring how writing is both freedom and entrapment.
    On the one hand yes, you can write create whatever you want.
    On the other, to write something or to truly tell a story close to your heart...
    I find myself tied down to writing only stories that would speak to me as a person...
    Dramas of life, things not working out,
    the pleasure of solving problems not because of being better,
    but being less conventional.
    Being less "chosen"
    As this is how I think, or I think... I think
    but what I want to read are things that workout, because it's simple, not stupid, but traditional and straight forward...

    in simpler words...
    I desire the gentle tale of Starwars, with simple beats and a tight single thread monomyth
    but my mind is entranced in the intrigue and tragedies and splits with complications after complications...
    much like Game of Thrones.
     
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    kirvy Active Member

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    Theme: Forgotten

    I started to seeing something in my mind
    blurred people standing in front on me
    familiar feeling roused deep into my mind
    I don't know each one of them.

    I feel that I was fall behind by time
    those familiar faces started talking to me
    the feeling being lost in a crossroad
    not knowing which way to go.

    It is worthy to remember them?
    That question in my mind was being rip apart
    tears starting to falling down
    I know that they are part of me
    that worth remembering.


    Edit: I'm just new in writing a poem



     
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    Siostar Well-Known Member

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    Playing with Poems Eighth Theme (Unlocked)
    A challenge for those who want to do it. Themed poems to enjoy and share, among those who dare:
    Untouchable like the wind
    Invisible like the breeze
    Unreachable like the sky
    Can it truly exist?

    Some believe, some don't
    They said, there are a tread
    Tie us, bond to bond
    As we pull or knot
    It guide us one at time
    With a deep color of red

    Both the theme I chosen, and the named word is [Fate]

    General Rules for housekeeping:
    1. All the previous Themes are still up for anyone who wishes to participate, we are only going to add more themes as time goes on.
    2. Please remember to tag the post of the theme you are writing, and also mention it on the post.
    3. Remember to have lots of fun~ :X3:

    Themes to date:
    "Freedom" by BlancFrost ❅
    "Distance" by Bielt ♡
    "Doll/Puppet" by Siostar ☆
    "Flowers/Blossoms" by BlancFrost ❅
    "Discovering" by Siostar ☆
    "Fear" by Bielt ♡
    "Forgotten" by BlancFrost ❅
    "Fate" By Siostar☆

    Calling those who have shared poems with me, just a small challenge nothing big. You don't have to do it~ There is no time limit.

    Participants
    BlancFrost
    kirvy
    Siostar
    Osamaru
     
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