(Story below this post if you want to skip the intro) So recently this idea for a novel has just been bubbling inside my head but I basically have zero experience in this stuff so what I will post below is a rough sketch of the idea and mental video in my mind. Any feedback will be taken as positively as possible (take your hands off that keyboard, person who is gonna type that obligatory 'you suck'). Edit - Due to popular demand, I'm putting the synopsis here. Huh, who demanded you asked? Why the many voices in my head of course Synopsis - What would happen if an immortal youth woke up from his hibernation in a new fantastical world.
if you're trying to write a novel to the best of your ability, taking two hours then posting on NUF with an idea isn't going to get you there. I've been doing the same for two days and have only written the prologue and part of chapter 1. The rest of the time has been spent on building the world. Write any ideas you have down so you don't forget them. Google docs is great for this.
What is it meant to reach the apex? In this world where there are countless races each with their own cultivation systems, One has to first transcend their own race to take the first step towards the heavenly throne. There is a saying which goes throughout the 7000 realms 'Master the heavenly laws, Shatter the divine tribulation, Claim the heavenly throne, Only then the divine sovereign reigns'. And from one small part of this incomparably vast universe rose a youth surpassing all shackles and coming but one step from Undergoing the divine tribulation. A Step only 12 others have reached. All 12 of them had come from illustrious backgrounds whose name would not be spoken casually in any corner of this world, bearing the title of heavenly lord, but where they stopped Seign stepped over and on this day he underwent his divine tribulations. The others overcome by indignations combined together their powers to oppose him before he sat on the heavenly throne and so Seign began his final battle. Midway through his final battle the tribulation struck, but Seign who cultivated the [heart of the divine mountain] merely smiled as he resumed his struggle. In this way 4600 realms broke in their battle and Seign with his tenacious will, all but deafeated everyone almost replacing the heavly dao with his own as the unsurmountable one but the other 12 not willing to bear a pointless death, used everything at their disposal, their very being to use themselves, leaving only their wills to destroy Seign. When all 12 combusted, the heavens were torn assunder and the realms, broken or intact all collapsed upon the Heavenly Throne. Seign seeing all this still smiled. Even if everything collapses, it matters not to him as he will stand eternal as the divine mountain. Using what little power he had after most of the flames of his immortal life extinguished he sat on the throne knowing full well that doing so meant distroying any chance of him surviving this. And so the universe collapsed upon him. What came next was both a miracle and the obvious conslusion at the same time. A new world was born after everything was destroyed. A new world which was born from the remnants of the old all combined together. A mighty solitary realm. The heavenly laws were destroyed but what happened was it forging into a new set of heavenly laws which governed over this solitary realm. Laws that were more firm and less divided resulted in this realm being the size of all 7000 realms combined together having a much richer world qi. And as for Seign, his body and soul were all but destroyed, him only managing to barely keep his soul from being extinguished with his incomparable will and heart. And his soul which combined together with the essence of the Heavenly throne, along with the universe, underwent the oblivion forging. And when the solitary realm was completed, his soul, which turned golden from colourless went into hibernation for a billion years. During which the essence of the heavenly throne, its spirit and soul, along with the solitary realm which saw Seign as its kin created a heavenly body for him, which though weaker than a mortals, had a brilliance and perfection much like his soul. After countless years, Seign opened his eyes.... UPDATE - Edited the chapte hope its a little more legible.
Whew that's finished. I seriously derped lul. Hope atleast some people see this after this major derp.
Thank you Linley sempai. If you will, please enter Grammar Nazi mode and look at my story too please.... *scolds himself for being too shameless*
Its done mate. Sorry for the derp, I thought I could be all posh and post two post one below the other. Forgot it doesn't work like that.
Hey buddy, your story was quite good despite it being your first work. Although there were a few times where the plot was hard to understand, I got the general gist of it. Let me give you a few tips. As a starting writer myself, I try to have a limit to the amount of content I can can put into one chapter. This is because if I spend 3 hours writing a 2000+ words chapter, I'm gonna be spending at least an hour the next day trying to think about where the plot is gonna go. Also, if you want your story to have good writing, re-read your story to see if it makes sense. Anyways, I'll try to follow this story to see where it goes. I can help you with the editing as well if you want. Also, check out my little story. It's called "The Interactions Between An Author and Protagonist." #ShamelessAdvertisement
Wait that was yours!? I loved that! Thank you for the advice and intentions but I'm not seriously thinking in that direction. This idea was just something that I could not keep inside of me and had to get out or I'd burst like those rich people from the kingsmen.
Also, I don't know how to set up a link so all my chapters are gonna be posted on that forum. I just released one yesterday and I'm currently working on today's. Just a heads up just In case. #AnotherShamelessAdvertisement
Hmm... Well after reading it, I feel like your story is more of a chapter synopsis rather than an actual chapter. I understand what you're trying to do, but you need to add in the extra detail and emotions within a chapter, rather than basically just explain everything that happens. How does the MC feel about this happening? Where's the dialog? It's almost impossible to have a chapter without any dialog, and this includes the MC's internal dialog.
*nods head* Um, yes. I was intending this to be the prologue and it somehow became this long. I was planning on explaining more about the MC in chapter 1. Thanks for the advice.
I've written novels once upon a time on RRL, and my best suggestion is plan your chapters, in each paragraph. Ex. MC is dying MC has internal dialogue about how it socks MC remembers ex MC wishes he didn't do what he did And continue for every paragraph until you find a good stopping point. Then just expand on each sentence to format a good paragraph. Trust me, it makes life easier lol
Hey,you know what? This sounds really good. I never read originals online but this just might change everything!!