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Discussion in 'General Chat' started by Viken, Sep 23, 2016.

  1. Teivel

    Teivel Well-Known Member

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    I'd leave that for a later chapter, what I'd do at the start would be something like this:

    >>I could see a man's back, he wore a raged red robe, it looked like it would fall apart soon moment. Something intrigued me, I knew him!

    So I creeped closer, to see his face, but something else caught my attention, on his hands layed a woman, dead. Dead, on my own arms.

    Straw ceeling... a nightmare.

    "Loa Mae..." I mutter.<<

    Note out that that's what I'd do, ignore it, take it, modify it, do what you want with it.

    PD: Basically, you should leave more intrigue at the start, what you wrote didn't have enough, what I wrote instead leaves a few things to think about; are they friends or enemies? How/why did she die (comparing to yours were you describe her injuries)? Why does he care so much? Is he/she a cultivator?
     
  2. VOLX98

    VOLX98 Well-Known Member

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    good luck writing