Short Story The Remnant

Discussion in 'Community Creations' started by Balthazzar, Dec 21, 2016.

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If I was to continue, how would you want it to go?

  1. 3rd person omnicient for the war over the throne

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    40.0%
  2. 3rd person limited for one person that is vying for the throne

    3 vote(s)
    20.0%
  3. 3rd person reincarnation

    6 vote(s)
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  4. dont continue because your story is shit

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  1. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    Guess what? I was bored..... thats why this exists......
    EDIT: *cough* obvi for westy *cough*
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    With eyes that held emptiness similar to space, he had stared at the scenery. It all seemed so superficial now. It didn’t make any sense at all. He had everything he wanted so why? Why did he feel as though a hole had been thoroughly carved in his soul? Why did he not feel….. gratified? He sat on the throne, conquered his enemies, and solidified his place in history.


    So why did he wish that he could take it all back? Why did he want to change what he did? Closing his eyes, he pondered for a short while. Never once did he feel that…. anything was as important as power. Why would he take a wife when all the women in the kingdom were at his beck and call? What was left to do now that everything had been taken? Who could stand by his side when all held fear towards him?


    It wasn’t like this in the past, it shouldn’t have been like this now. He thought that just maybe, he would have enjoyed life more if he had taken the job given to him by his father. By now, he should have had a wife, kids, and a stable income. He should have had happiness. So why was he led astray by his greed? Why did he perceive that his family held him back? Why did he take them for granted and discard them?


    As usual though, no answers presented themselves. he had gone through this many times but he couldn’t understand his younger self. He was now sifting through the memories he had stored. The feelings he had drawn and actions he had taken. It was sad really, an old man on his deathbed regretted most every choice he made. If only he could go back in time and redo everything.


    He couldn’t obviously. This wasn’t some fantasy novel. This was real life and when you acted, you must deal with the consequences. As a young man, he was filled with vigor, passion even. A promising young lad that wanted to forge his way into the history books. With a sword in one hand, a shield in the other, and an army at his beck and call. It was nigh-impossible to foresee this ending.


    An ending filled with the smoke of war and the blood of the innocent. An ending where happiness was not the common thing it once was. An ending where the normal thing to do was struggle. He hadn’t made anything better. He had only destroyed everything he strived to perfect. His reign was near it’s end and he could only hope that the next ruler would fix his mistakes.


    Breathing deeply, his eyes bulged momentarily as he broke into a coughing fit. His condition was rapidly deteriorating, he didn’t have much time left. Even considering that though, he felt the same as always. No one was around to care for him as usual. The quiet was his only company. He laid not as a king, but as an old man, decrepit and calm.


    Too many, he could be considered ancient. He had been lucky to survive so long. With that lifespan however, came endless remorse. Once, he was a young man that felt unkillable. No one could suppress him, he was undefeated. Now though, he was only an old man with enough regrets to fill a sea. No children to take over, no wife to stand by his side.


    Nothing but a remnant of what he used to be. With one last breath, he closed his eyes for the last time and thus, the reign under the Tragic King had ended.
     
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  2. Westeller

    Westeller Smokin' Sexy Style!! Staff Member

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    No children, huh? So next up is the civil war over his throne, I guess. Yay. More happiness!
     
  3. Falhrus

    Falhrus Avoiding enemies is hard work y'know?

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    Areeee? No reincarnation?
     
  4. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    what? no its done....
    im too lazy to continue it
    NO ITS DONE
     
  5. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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  6. The great metalunicorn

    The great metalunicorn [Blood Countess][Glue Overlord][Big Sister][War]

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    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    the poll...
    not the story.....
    iits above the story dumbass
     
  8. The great metalunicorn

    The great metalunicorn [Blood Countess][Glue Overlord][Big Sister][War]

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    *rolls eyes*
     
  9. mrawesome69

    mrawesome69 I'm getting too old for this shit

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    are you really planing to continue this?
     
  10. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    *mumbles incoherently about how you always need to have the last word*
     
  11. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    doubt it but if I ever get bored.....
     
  12. The great metalunicorn

    The great metalunicorn [Blood Countess][Glue Overlord][Big Sister][War]

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    Of course.
     
  13. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    knew it
     
  14. Carm

    Carm Drip drop, when will time stop

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    Aren't you supposed to be on hiatus?
     
  15. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    dude.. less active.... how many times must i say
     
  16. The great metalunicorn

    The great metalunicorn [Blood Countess][Glue Overlord][Big Sister][War]

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    That ship set sail a while ago.
     
  17. The great metalunicorn

    The great metalunicorn [Blood Countess][Glue Overlord][Big Sister][War]

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    Because you said you were going on an indefinite hiatus....
     
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  18. Carm

    Carm Drip drop, when will time stop

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    Yes but you seem so much more active than usual.
    What ship?
     
  19. Balthazzar

    Balthazzar 『Reformed Member of NuF Society』

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    IM LESS ACTIVE!
    I wasnt even on yesterday
     
  20. Carm

    Carm Drip drop, when will time stop

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    There
     
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