There’s no way I’d want boobs that big! D:

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  1. ohko

    ohko 【LGBTQ+ association】 【ohko is ohko!】

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    I ended up deciding to make a thread for my Scribble Hub original novel, since I feel like I still not that easy to put a lot of rambles or comments about the writing process. So for now, I'll be make use of this space as random commentary space, onegaishimasu!

    By the way, you should totally join Scribble Hub! I think @Tony did a great job with it, and I really look forward to seeing it grow! Let's add lots of stories and novels to that site together! :blobhero:

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    Title: There's no way I'd want boobs that big! D:

    Synopsis:

    God is a pervert.

    I decided that after I died and found myself in heaven.

    Although I’m happy that God offered to grant my lifelong wish (to become a girl), the only potential bodies that he offered as options were beautiful bishojos with DDD-size boobs, jade-like skin, and porn-star like curves. He tried to convince me to take the one with the biggest ass and thus become the holy sex princess of some freakish isekai magic kingdom, but I immediately flushed a bright tomato color and punched God right in the face without thinking.

    Ah yeah, whoops.

    Anyways, I think I made God really angry at me, so now I’m reincarnated in this horrible traumatizing medieval setting as a genuinely unattractive and flat-as-a-washboard girl with some kind of weird autoimmune skin condition.

    Every day is a struggle, and it’s taking everything I have to merely survive.

    Is there a hope for a better life at all? Even amidst this jungle of darkness, can I find my way out of poverty, meet new people to love, and aspire to make my mark towards a better world?

    Welcome to the story of my genderbent life!

    Note: This story is *not* ecchi! Make sure you read the tags! The story starts out quite dark!

    Genres: Adventure Drama Fantasy Gender Bender Isekai Mature Romance Tragedy

    Tags: Adventurers Alchemy Androgynous Characters Character Growth Corruption Curses Dark Demons Discrimination Disfigurement Female Protagonist Healing Male to Female Medieval Mob Protagonist Parody Past Trauma Survival Transmigration Ugly Protagonist

    Table of Contents:
    1. Author’s Note
    2. Chapter 1 – It’s probably not a good idea to punch God in the face
    3. Chapter 2 – God must really hate you if your isekai universe is too realistic
    4. Reflection – Inside the heart of darkness, and the belly of the whale
    5. Chapter 3 – Lately it’s become more difficult to deal in absolutes
    6. Chapter 4 – Mirror, Mirror on the wall, who is the fairest one of them all?
     
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    Scarce reaping my good karma

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  3. ohko

    ohko 【LGBTQ+ association】 【ohko is ohko!】

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    Oh, and I really welcome any feedback and comments on how I can improve my writing!

    I'm actually struggling quite a bit with this one because it feels like what comes out of my writing isn't quite the same as I imagine it. More specifically, I'm kind of having an identity crisis with what kind of tone I want to take with the story. I'm kind of afraid that the tone of the story will fluctuate too much from chapter to chapter (mostly because I think I'm fairly good at writing either pure comedy or pure angst, but I don't have very developed skills at writing something in between), especially because I haven't been very good at controlling the atmosphere of the content I produce.

    My writing aura is heavily influenced by my mood, you see?

    I really want this story to be light-hearted, and in fact I even put a comedy tag, but somehow chapter 1 ended up being a lot darker than I anticipated. :sweating_profusely::sweating_profusely::sweating_profusely: I guess it's a bad habit.

    I'm still writing (and re-writing) chapter 2, and I'm trying to figure out a way I can reconcile the conflict between having a quasi-serious topic matter and light-hearted tone.

    I would really like to push this novel in a light-hearted and fun direction, so I guess I'll try my best for chapter two!
     
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    Cnacan Well-Known Member

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    Yuri?
     
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    madness- The Wanderer

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    Donutmindme [dounut][Zodiac:Golden snake][PROcrastinator]

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    Same!(I think my mood isn’t that good...even though it’s spring break...)
    This looks a very interesting novel~
    :cookie:
     
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    SnowdropLily 100% Procrastinator

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    *like*
     
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  8. ohko

    ohko 【LGBTQ+ association】 【ohko is ohko!】

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    I don't think the main ship will be yuri, but I'm definitely open to having GL somewhere at somepoint!

    I get kind of worried seeing all the positive reception from the synopsis/chapter 1 because I just can't help but think to myself that people are going to hate it all of a sudden after reading chapter 2. :blobcry::blobcry::blobcry:

    I think I probably hold the record for the most 1-star reviews on ScribbleHub right now. :blobupset:

    *sigh* But then again, what can I do? I wish people would leave comments instead of just ratings.
     
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    Alverost Well-Known Member

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    You can consider changing the title of the story? There seem to be a sort of dissociation between the story tone with the title tone. The title should be something like a teaser for the story as well as a reflection of the story. "Don't judge a book by its cover" - To be honest, a lot of people judge a book by its cover/title.
     
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  10. Ruyue

    Ruyue If I can't get out of bronze am I stupid?

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    Oh This one was actually good, I enjoyed it after it was rewritten. I like how it was very realistic and explained everything with also great world building, but the time skip needed kinda a bit more of an explanation. I was actually kind of confused of the rag trader part.
     
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    Donutmindme [dounut][Zodiac:Golden snake][PROcrastinator]

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    I wasn’t confused at all, I guess that’s just me.
     
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    ohko 【LGBTQ+ association】 【ohko is ohko!】

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    Chapter 4 is up! I think this is the first real chapter where the story actually starts moving. >.<

    These are all really great points, and I see exactly where you're coming from! :aww::aww::aww:

    I wonder if I should start looking for suggestions on possible title changes....... :blobxd:

    Thank you for your comment!

    :aww: I'm glad it was better the second time!

    Yeah, I still have a lot to work on since I'm not really good at writing novels still, and sometimes it feels like all I'm doing to stitching together a bunch of random thoughts and scenes. I used to write diary/journal entries all the time, so I think my writing style feels especially verbose and disjointed.

    I got a few comments that the complicated monologues distract from the story too! But then again, I'm not exactly sure how to change my style. :sweating_profusely: I'll keep trying harder though!
     
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    Personally I wouldn't bother too much on changing style. Let your own writing style develop as you go. The more you write the better you become as an author and writer.
     
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    I started working on a cover today by repainting some artwork online (no tablet sadness T.T), but I'm not sure if it's good at all.

    The title probably needs to change eventually but I can't think of anything qwq
     
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    joey183 The Mysterious Entity

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    It's good but the atmosphere is pretty heavy. It requires a lot of deep thinking and make me feels pessimistic after reading it because of the high realism like the description of how transgender are being treated on earth. Still, each chapter draws you in deeper which is why I kinda like it even though I'm not really into this kind of genre. Honestly, I find the title kind of misleading because it gives the feeling that would be like a comedy but instead it's all dread and drought, like I've been baited to read this. Nevertheless, it's a good read and I'm looking forward to more updates. Do keep up the good work!!
     
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    It's a really nice cover, fitting for story tone. But once again I do recommend changing the title.
     
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    ohko 【LGBTQ+ association】 【ohko is ohko!】

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    Yeah, I'm definitely looking for any suggestions. :blobsweat_2::blobsweat_2::blobsweat_2:

    I'm drawing a blank right now, but maybe something will pop up later in the week.
     
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    I would suggest that you think about the theme and plot of the story. As well as where do you intend to go with the story. That would typically help with naming it.
     
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    And if after that, you are still stuck then you could add an author note on your next chapter release asking the reader to post suggestion in the comments.
     
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    asriu fu~ fu~ fu~

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    I expect something else
    really
    truly

    gimme back my expectation!
     
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