Poem Wonders of a Certain Dance

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  1. J-Mitch

    J-Mitch ⚖ Tipping the Scales of the World

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    @Kerbasi

    ~ Wonders of a Certain Dance ~
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    Here, the winds come bitingly harsh like a winter's sneeze;

    There, the winds come warm, just a nice summer breeze;

    Here, the land is filled with the sound of rustling leaves;

    There, the land is filled with rooster shrieks.


    Your waves lap against your shores, cooling the hot sand.

    My leaves turn gold and orange, dead by the weather's hand.


    There are thousands of miles between us;

    A thousand miles and half a world away;


    You live in the future - a life yet defined;

    And I come with my fate just a step behind;


    I have yet to see you in person;

    But you have already taken my very breath;

    And now I suffocate, drowning in your absence;

    Only to gain new life when I hear your laugh;


    You are the force that drives me forward;

    I am the force that keeps you from turning back;

    You are the light that has no borders;

    And I am the feeling after a midnight snack;


    There is no one like you,

    Just as I'd like to believe it's the same for me;

    And even if there were others,

    You are the only one that matters to me;


    When we speak, our talks are filled with a push or a pull;

    You try to test me, and I you;

    When we don't speak, there is comfort in the silence;

    I know you are there, and I know you feel it too;


    Life;

    Strife;

    Hope;

    Stance;

    Wonders of a Certain Dance;
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    Even though @Lonelycity dared me to make a poem to you, I had fun doing it. I hope you liked it too.​
     
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  2. MangoGuy

    MangoGuy Rambling Mango

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    Damn that was good!!! you went for the pre modern rhyming type poem structure which really fit the theme!!
     
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    March Well-Known Member

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    ayyy! I saw midnight snack and I was like Ye Xiao (Realms of the Firmament)
     
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    Danis {(Harem Sect Leader)}{Trickster}&{Lurker}

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    Nice (y)
     
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    jojo_48 『Blood Type: S』『HGWT』

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    Wahhhhh~
    So cuteeeee~
    *about to die of cuteness overload*
     
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    Kerbasi 『Pusheen Queen ✿』

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    *blushes*

    I couldn't stop smiling while reading this tbh

    (⺣◡⺣)♡*

    And I would say a lot more things in this thread, but I prefer to tell you in private. >///< *kisses Mitch's cheek*

    I really LOLed at this part xD inside jokes are the best hahaha *hugs*
     
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  7. J-Mitch

    J-Mitch ⚖ Tipping the Scales of the World

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    *hugs*
     
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    Hunta shameless

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    Sounds like an anime openings :D
     
  9. Ken The One-Eyed Suicidal

    Ken The One-Eyed Suicidal 「ZA ROYAL ROASTER」「ZEE KOUHAI」

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    I was going to say "cool poem bro" but then I noticed that I was grinning like an idiot in Springtime... Freakin' fluffiness
    Ps: You normies should just explode.
     
  10. Liyus

    Liyus Laksha's Desu~ Cat

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    my guess it's......that person is pregnant mother......:coffee:
     
  11. J-Mitch

    J-Mitch ⚖ Tipping the Scales of the World

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    ???
     
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    Liyus Laksha's Desu~ Cat

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    that poem it's seem to be a pregnant woman talking about the child that is about to be born......
     
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    AMissingLinguist [Not Here][Blank Sect][Nuffian #N]

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    Nice poem. It has facts and rhymes. I enjoyed the format and the feeling of it, even if I don't understand poetic structuring.
     
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    J-Mitch ⚖ Tipping the Scales of the World

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    There is no poetic structuring. Free verse. You can see the last bit is a Cinquain.
     
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    AMissingLinguist [Not Here][Blank Sect][Nuffian #N]

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    Thanks for explaining. I now know what a Cinquain is.
     
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  16. Lonelycity

    Lonelycity Twice Bitten Thrice Shy

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    That was a nice poem... @J-Mitch...
    Except I totally forgot about the dare I gave you.... Lolz
    Now I feel inspired to write one....
     
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