Novel I Am Kim Xiufeng Katou

Discussion in 'Community Fictions' started by LysUltima, Aug 31, 2017.

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Is this any good?

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  1. Acerleaf

    Acerleaf Well-Known Member

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    @LysUltima
    Also, liked your story~

    Just needs slightly better flow and transitions~
    But I liked the premise of the story xD
     
    Acerleaf, Sep 18, 2017
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    Acerleaf Well-Known Member

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    Watch "For Honor" gameplay.

    Viking berserkers sway around their opponents holding twin axes without getting hit~
    xD


    At 0:55 huhuhu
     
    Acerleaf, Sep 18, 2017
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  3. LysUltima

    LysUltima Riichi! Tsumo! Toitoi! Suuankou!?

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    Un, I'm going over the chapters and editing them.

    Maybe~
     
    LysUltima, Sep 18, 2017
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  4. Acerleaf

    Acerleaf Well-Known Member

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    But it's your story so don't worry too much xD
    If I am a girl, boy, leaf, its what you want~

    I still liked it anyway~

    *sways away*
     
    Acerleaf, Sep 18, 2017
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    Hi fellow writer,
    I enjoyed the story you got here mainly because the style of writing and interesting narration you brought to the story.
    But still I can only give you a 4/5. This is because I felt like your story does not have a soul or foundation of the plot. What I mean is I am still clueless on the story even after reading couple of the chapters. I think you also meant it that way, just to give a funny simple story from the way how easy the MC got the OP technique. Waiting for more. Good luck.
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    Alavaladhi, Sep 18, 2017
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  6. Wobbly

    Wobbly [Unstabbable][He Who Courts Death][Whimsical]

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    Nyooooo . . . my name pun doesn't work with angel~
     
    Wobbly, Sep 18, 2017
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  7. LysUltima

    LysUltima Riichi! Tsumo! Toitoi! Suuankou!?

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    Was I supposed to call you Frank N. Stein Angel?
     
    LysUltima, Sep 18, 2017
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  8. Wobbly

    Wobbly [Unstabbable][He Who Courts Death][Whimsical]

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    Make it Frankenstein Angel then~
     
    Wobbly, Sep 18, 2017
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  9. LysUltima

    LysUltima Riichi! Tsumo! Toitoi! Suuankou!?

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    No~
    I'll call you Warlo Angel then.
     
    LysUltima, Sep 18, 2017
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  10. Wobbly

    Wobbly [Unstabbable][He Who Courts Death][Whimsical]

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    that doesn't even make sense~
     
    Wobbly, Sep 18, 2017
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  11. LysUltima

    LysUltima Riichi! Tsumo! Toitoi! Suuankou!?

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    Wasn't your old name warlokid?
     
    LysUltima, Sep 18, 2017
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  12. Wobbly

    Wobbly [Unstabbable][He Who Courts Death][Whimsical]

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    no, why?
     
    Wobbly, Sep 18, 2017
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  13. Lhie

    Lhie 『Procrastinator』「Argetlam」『Bibliophile』

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    On chapter 5 let me and your daddy adopt you in the story, okay~? XD
     
    Lhie, Sep 18, 2017
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  14. LysUltima

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    What was it; I forgot...
     
    LysUltima, Sep 18, 2017
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    Spoiler, most of you guys die.
     
    LysUltima, Sep 18, 2017
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    Q.Q
     
    Acerleaf, Sep 18, 2017
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  17. Lhie

    Lhie 『Procrastinator』「Argetlam」『Bibliophile』

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    How did we have a son like you *cry*
     
    Lhie, Sep 18, 2017
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    ???
     
    Wobbly, Sep 18, 2017
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    Lhie 『Procrastinator』「Argetlam」『Bibliophile』

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    The leaf is shaaaaaking!!
     
    Lhie, Sep 18, 2017
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  20. LysUltima

    LysUltima Riichi! Tsumo! Toitoi! Suuankou!?

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    Your old username
     
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