How is my new title and synopsis for my novel??

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  1. don_offl

    don_offl Active Member

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    Title :
    Rise of the Legendary Emperor


    Synopsis

    After many years Don returned to his homeland with only one goal in his mind, to be the Emperor who conquers and rules everyone.

    "Only fools would chase beauties, real men chase power with power everything in this world would be mine"

    The humans in the world Don stepped in are gaining power as mysterious powers started to hunt the other races.

    The Only man between the Extinction of the other races and the humans was the man who had a mysterious past of his own, who is planning to unite the races into one Powerful Empire.

    This is not the story of a man who had a system to help him achieve his goal. This is the Rise of the legendary Emperor who accomplish his goals by spilling blood and sweat

    link : https://www.webnovel.com/book/16129893106084105/Emperor-of-Kings

    (Avoid face slapping the poor author to minimize the chances of getting you know what lol)
     
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    ExcitableFoci Well-Known Member

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    Real men chase power with- / There the with acts as a conductor that implies something that real men chase power with.

    The correct way would be something along these lines: Real men chase power. And with power, everything in this world will be mine.

    I think that this sentence lacks a connector, something like: The humans in the world that Don stepped in.

    You didn't conjugate the verb here. It is 'accomplishes' or 'who will accomplish his goals'.
     
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    don_offl Active Member

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    its sounds better thanks Ekfreet
     
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