Short Story Isekai Harem with a slow start

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  1. sinyy

    sinyy Active Member

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    Hey guys, not sure if this is a good place to post this but I hope you guys can give me some feedback on my first novel!
    I'm fairly confident about the progression of the story, but not much when it comes to the slow development of it. Any kind of feedback or criticism is very much welcome!! Thanks!!

    Bypass the link restriction with those dots:
    www(dot)wattpad(dot)com/story/146207702-another-world-rabbit-eyes
     
    sinyy, Jun 17, 2018
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    elengee Daoist Ninefaps

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    How does one write a 'short story' with a slow start.
     
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    Jed333 Well-Known Member

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    seems fine
     
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    sinyy Active Member

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    Haha, there wasn't much to choose from in this thread :x
     
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