Novel The Summoned Hero's Brother is Black-Bellied

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  1. The Douche

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    The Summoned Hero's Brother is Black-Bellied
    Summary: Two siblings, Yunis and Noel Versaya, had suddenly found themselves to have been summoned to another world in order to defeat the demon king.
    Having a strong sense of wanting to help them, Yunis decided to be a hero, but Noel...Well, he had other plans in mind.

    Edit: Due to suggestions(and how it seemed like I somehow made it racist), I changed the title to The Summined Hero's Brother is Black to The Summoned Hero's Brother is Black-Bellied

    Prologue

    “Heroes! We request you to save our world from the demon king!”, the man wearing luxurious clothing pleaded.

    ““…””

    We had suddenly found ourselves standing at the foot of what appeared to be a throne.

    A man, whom I presumed to be a king, spoke to us with a very dignified voice.

    “Um…Hero?”, the young girl, my younger sister, asked with unease.

    She stuck herself close behind me, in order to not have attention focused on to her.

    “...”

    I on the other-hand, simply stayed quiet as I try to scan our surroundings.

    Those that were inside of the throne room had various expressions on their faces when they saw us.

    I could pick up their conversations, to which I furrowed my brows in annoyance.

    Some were saying that we look too young to be heroes, some were trying to size us up, and some were even showing their attraction towards my little sister.

    I became annoyed but I still tried to keep calm.

    “It seems that this one had forgotten to explain you current situation. This one ask for your pardon”

    The king, bowed his head in apology. Much to the surprise of those present.

    “So that we may properly discuss things, let us move on to a suitable room”

    Saying so, the king waved his hand and we were guided away by men wearing shiny metal armor. Our consent had not been given and it seemed like they would listen to our words.

    I am in no position to make a scene so for now, I will follow what he says. I need to make sure that my sister is safe…else I’ll have to do something that would make her worry.

    ***

    On that day, the clouds above the kingdom of Belle had a strange appearance.

    The sky right above the kingdom felt very different from normal.
    The sun had created a large golden halo, making those that saw it, admire the spectacle.
    Those with religious beliefs, had started praying as though they were witnessing god’s miracle.


    But at the horizon of the kingdom, a large black cloud had started creeping in, slowly.
    It somehow made some that saw it become uneasy, while others had felt comfort from the darkness’s rolling crawl.

    It was still unknown to many, but two individuals that will shake the foundations of the world had appeared.

    Whether if it is for the good of the world or something entirely different, no one could tell.
     
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  2. AHKoT

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    The hell with this racist name? Couldnt u just change it into evil or something? Black sounds racist af...
     
  3. Ikan

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    God damn SJW
     
  4. Yaoikun

    Yaoikun The other Red Siblings | Cursed Black Knight

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    You should change black to African American. And write the backstory about her African American brother's father, the mother and her half brother.
     
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  5. DocB

    DocB "I see you, little mouse! Run along"

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    for once i agree with the sjw, black is an color, if you want to describe him as evil at the very least use dark, you wouldn't use red for angry or green for jealous
    black simply sounds that it about some black person
     
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    i wouldn't go ahead and call the title racist without know what the story is about, but it is a confusing title. either way, in terms of word selection black is the wrong term.
     
  7. Sherrynity

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    At least make it black-bellied or something.
     
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    Yaoikun The other Red Siblings | Cursed Black Knight

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    I suggest that you also write about her African American brother conflict in living in a society of Asian people.
     
  9. The Douche

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    Good point. Just black made it seem like the brother is actually racially black
     
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    And here I thought that the black meant his mother cuckolded his father.
     
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    Seems like it could be interesting, is there a raw link for this?
     
  12. Walter vi Britannia

    Walter vi Britannia Well-Known Member

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    Haha, I was expecting a hilarious comedy from that amazingly racist title...but seems like I've been misled.
     
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    Sorry bout that, I don't have the ability to be literary skilled in being racist.
     
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    lmao, what? I dont know where you are living but for me that kind of title just screams racist in where I'm currently living. The hell is wrong with pointing that out?
     
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    Yaoikun The other Red Siblings | Cursed Black Knight

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    Hey I've been waiting for chapter 1 of this amazingly racist novel, when will you update dude @The Douche

    Sorry if me replying to this thread is against the forum rules.
     
  16. Little Pretty

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    It was a confusing title, yes. But I don't think it's inherently racist.

    The word, "Black" had been used many times in ln/wn/etc. to mean something like blackened or black-bellied. While you mayhaps, will be surprised that what you find in the first chapter is not what you'd expect (a dark-skinned character being the main character with a sibling who is a summoned hero), I don't think it's worth getting angry over. In fact, I find it strange that you would find being a black person as something inherently racist.
     
  17. AHKoT

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    That was two years ago, honestly, my English proficiency back then was subpar at best, just ignore it, I fully understood what the author meant now
     
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    It's my fault too, actually, for jumping on-board while not paying attention to the date of the discourse. I'm not into dredging up old stuff. My sincerest apology.
     
  19. YunHai Laohu

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    So i'm guessing this is a dead Thread? 0_o

    There has never been a story called The Summoned Hero's Brother is Black.
    There never will be a story called The Summoned Hero's Brother is Black-Bellied.
    What a sad life we live. #DeadStory