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  1. Silver Snake

    Silver Snake Magician of NUF|Show-off|Awkward|Genius

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    to be content one must not be bound
    to be free one must be themselves
    to be alone one must endure
    to be responsible one must know
    to be strong

    I'm alright
    everything I see I hate
    burning my eyes so bright
    everything I am it dissipates
    filled with so much fright
    how could you ever relate

    The first one I had was not talking about a past relationship, but about a family member's death nyaa. I have never had relations nyaa.
     
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  2. mcmunhuu

    mcmunhuu [Got rejected by LaDyViL] [T_T] [No Game No Life]

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    You have zero sense of literature
     
  3. Art Of Throwing

    Art Of Throwing Spare me

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    There's many room for improvements.
     
  4. chencking

    chencking [Daolord Grammar Nazi]

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    The same holds for grammar. The occasional capitalized "I" makes it even more irritating when the "I" is not capitalized.
     
  5. imsodone

    imsodone 『Creep』

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    And here I thought that someone's complaining about how hard to sleep is. I was already preparing my rant about how holy the divine being called sleeping is.
     
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    coveted Sexiest Banana Alive

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    I prefer this poem. No seriously. I can feel the literary intelligence of the poet.
     
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  7. Fossil

    Fossil 「Spooky」「Scary」「Skeleton」

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    Did you have any to begin with?
     
  8. EvilMc

    EvilMc 『Reformed』

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    Lolz
     
  9. chencking

    chencking [Daolord Grammar Nazi]

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    It's not, but it is the most annoying
     
  10. imsodone

    imsodone 『Creep』

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    Savage.
     
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  11. mcmunhuu

    mcmunhuu [Got rejected by LaDyViL] [T_T] [No Game No Life]

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    literature i will show you
    Aaah kami why
    Why i ask you
    For your zero sense of literature
    i dont think this is poem
    but ya like this hahahahahahha kami if you there make me cultivator then
    i will make every person on earth to pray to you :)
    Poem real deal
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    haaa in your case this would be better
    [​IMG]
     
  12. chencking

    chencking [Daolord Grammar Nazi]

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    The uncapitalized lines followed by the ambiguous pronouns
     
  13. mcmunhuu

    mcmunhuu [Got rejected by LaDyViL] [T_T] [No Game No Life]

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    Better lol
    Haaa life why i care
    All i whanted was to see you
    In my life there was only you
    All i saw was a picture of you
    In there there was two magnificent mountain
    Like telling me to grab you
    But my virgin hand never did its work
    Life is hard but im happy
    Boredom this is a never ending torture
    Nevertheless i see your picture
    Name:How great can boob be
     
  14. KingOfMangonia

    KingOfMangonia [The Progenitor] [The Mango] [Logic]

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    read my signature for them sick rhymes.. no srsly, i have like this huge picture thats dedicated solely to teaching people how to rhyme well...
     
  15. KingOfMangonia

    KingOfMangonia [The Progenitor] [The Mango] [Logic]

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    I wasn't the oneto write that poem :p
     
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    I will post Limericks.

    Good night.
    Last time you said farewell
    I said, please stay, Anabell
    You said, say no more
    It's over, step out the door
    When it ended, I said go to hell

    Drunk
    In a bar, I had my companion
    Beer was his name and roasted onion
    Eating and drowning these sorrows away
    Not wanting to remember I lived day after day
    Ah nothing rhymes with onion

    Haha
     
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  17. Silver Snake

    Silver Snake Magician of NUF|Show-off|Awkward|Genius

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    I wish you had let this sad thread die nyaa
     
  18. Pau

    Pau Useless Hamster

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    Let me try... Let me try...

    Roses are red
    Violets are blue
    Potato is brown
    Banana is yellow
    @Shem 's heart is black
    pantsu is white
    Looking for happiness
    Got robbed by blackjack
     
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  19. Silver Snake

    Silver Snake Magician of NUF|Show-off|Awkward|Genius

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    Every time someone comments on this thread a little part of me dies nyaa
     
  20. mcmunhuu

    mcmunhuu [Got rejected by LaDyViL] [T_T] [No Game No Life]

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    Lol then
    Roses are red
    Violets are blue
    Our speech is dark
    Good night my fellow Dark Cult members
    Poem
    When we born our heart was white as snow
    When we raised our heart was gray like smoke
    When we graudate from school our heart was black as coal
    When we get in job our heart was like black ink
    When we lvl up from worker to leader our heart becomes black like abyss
    When we die our heart becomes more black that no one saw
    When go to yellow river our heart becomes pure white again but not like snow but gray
    Pls dont